Jan Allison Poet Senryu

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Proof Time Does Not Fly

sam grabbed his dads watch
then threw it up in the air...
fists flew when time stopped


Writing Challenge 5, May 2019, Senryu Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Dear Heart

5/30/19

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Andrea Dietrich June 10, 2019 at 3:41 PM LOVED yours! congrats, Jan.

Constance La France June 10, 2019 at 11:05 AM Jan, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful Senryu and I love those images too!

David Smith June 4, 2019 at 7:42 PM You have also proved there was no catch in time. Like it. Regards David in NZ

Mark Toney June 3, 2019 at 11:43 PM Very clever, Jan! ~Mark

Gershon Wolf June 2, 2019 at 4:21 PM Very, very cute! G.L. in the contest, Jan! :) gw Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:51 PM thanks for your continued support GW:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 2, 2019 at 12:50 PM - A great example ... children often have "itching" in their fingers :) - Good luck in the contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:50 PM they can also take what parent say too literally!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 1, 2019 at 9:58 AM Oh what a scene that must have caused, Jan! I often wonder what gets into children's minds sometimes! Hugs // paul Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:50 PM I think its best we don't know sometimes Paul lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues May 31, 2019 at 7:01 AM Wow! So great! I can see the scene! Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:49 PM I had visions of an expensive Rolex coming crashing down to earth and the kid saying but dad you said how time flies lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier May 31, 2019 at 5:32 AM A whole story eloquently captured in three short lines. Well done, Jan. Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:48 PM Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 30, 2019 at 8:40 PM Beautiful, Jan.. good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:48 PM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 30, 2019 at 7:09 PM oh wow, ME LIKEY!!! Jan Allison June 2, 2019 at 5:47 PM was fun to write:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta May 30, 2019 at 6:37 PM I liked your original concept, i.e., "and watched time fly in the air" … Good luck! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison May 30, 2019 at 6:40 PM thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan x

Ann Gilmour May 30, 2019 at 4:42 PM Really clever Jan, quess he was in big trouble!. Good luck in the contest, with kindest thoughts Ann xx Jan Allison May 30, 2019 at 5:00 PM I just got this silly vision of a kid saying 'look dad i can make time fly'... and then suffering the consequences! not that boxing a child's ears is pc of course! hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 30, 2019 at 3:59 PM Good one Jan, who clocked who lol. Good luck. Tom Jan Allison May 30, 2019 at 4:02 PM lol Tom, I would have liked to use some punctuation in the final line but its not allowed, glad it made sense:-) hugs jan xx