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Promising Never To Be Apart

Promising never to be apart I never knew at the time if it was the right thing to do If so much of my budding life truly belonged to you, Yet I proceeded demurely to let you hold my arm And decided with some trepidation to coyly tag along. Our life together began so aimlessly unpredictable Not knowing the directions to a successful endeavor. Tenuous were the links of love young and immature, Unprepared to face obstacles potently formidable. A clash of our aspirations and untenable ambitions Soon brought about forces of immutable conditions, As the portrait of young love cracked under pressure And soon we broke up, bereft of romantic pleasures. That was some fifty years ago as we now recall fondly For the interlude of our separation lasted only briefly, And we began anew to enjoy a triumphant relationship Cracking the code of life to raise a wonderful family. The sketch of our being hangs proudly in our hearts, Never giving a second thought to our wary shaky start. Brittle bones now foretell life remaining is quite short So we make the best of it, promising never to be apart. Placed 5th November 2, 2017 Eight Word Challenge Sponsor: John Hamilton

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Date: 11/6/2017 8:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your nice success ...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 8:58:00 AM
Thanks Probir!
Date: 11/4/2017 11:34:00 AM
Congrats Vijay on a great placement in my contest!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 8:58:00 AM
Thanks John!
Date: 11/4/2017 9:32:00 AM
Congratulations Vijay! I am happy to see you won too :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 8:57:00 AM
Thanks Heidi!
Date: 11/4/2017 8:50:00 AM
This is well-presented, Vijay. Congrats on your placement.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/6/2017 8:57:00 AM
Thanks Lin!
Date: 11/3/2017 7:43:00 AM
Beautiful sentiments Vijay, one of the best I have seen for this contest.. You used the words so well..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 7:58:00 AM
Many thanks Silent One!
Date: 11/3/2017 4:27:00 AM
What an amazing write my friend! You have mastered the art of a grand promise to forever be implemented between two loving individuals! Too bad this isn't your reality, cause this forever relationship is just what we all need! I'm lucky to have my forever relationship, with my soul mate we have agreed to never part! What a grandiose piece you have written here Vijay! Great Work!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/3/2017 6:26:00 AM
Thank you Russell--appreciate your comments, as always!
Date: 11/2/2017 8:57:00 PM
A beautifully written poem Vijay. Such tender sentiments poetically expressed. Good luck in the contest!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/2/2017 9:57:00 PM
Thanks Susan..appreciate your comments!
Date: 11/2/2017 8:00:00 PM
OH, Vijay, you have in your last line my expression used for my last post. Make the best of it!! So glad you did that. I love this. If it is your own reality, GOOD for YOU. I really like this.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/2/2017 10:00:00 PM
This is fiction Andrea. Just looked up your poem again.. a wonderful coincidence that we think alike.. yours is a much different theme, however. And just so you know, I posted my poem today before 5 pm much before your posting at 7:21 pm. Thanks Andrea!
Date: 11/2/2017 4:43:00 PM
This is an amazing poem that should do well in the contest Vijay. Very well written! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/2/2017 5:50:00 PM
Thank you Heidi.. appreciate your encouraging comments!

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