PROMISES

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You promised to love me till death us do part.
I promised I’d always be faithful to you.
Our lives seemed idyllic back then at the start,
As, day-after-day, my deep love for you grew.
Then, right out of the blue, you shattered my heart,
When you told me you’d fallen for someone new.
Now, somebody else wants to promise that stuff.
But I’ve told her once bitten is quite enough.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Woods Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 10:16 AM
Oh perfection! It seems as if you didn't even try to stay in this strict form but just wrote it as your heart led you to... no struggling with syllables or rhyme, it's seamless and flowing. The message is a sad one but so common to have this heart break. There's always hope though!! Congratulations on your win!! Xoxo
Rodrigues Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 1:14 PM
I’m sure it is hard for many to get over that first love… Now, somebody else wants to promise that stuff. But I’ve told her once bitten is quite enough...Congrats on your win!
Pinet Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 10:58 AM
Congratulations, Bryn! Your heartfelt poem "PROMISES" has placed "Second" in my contest. It stood out with its superb use of simple language to make its point. Very well done, my friend. Please SoupMail me for details on your prize.
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