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Princess of the Petals

Beyond her veil; eyes induced by secretive stars became drawn to a path illuminated by flickering, shimmering pale moonlight. Each spirited step led to the revelation of her secret garden. But upon arrival at her doorstep; disbelief disabled my soul's delight. Through the mist all I saw were rotten leaves among crushed rose petals - wilting. In shame, a naked cherry blossom tree stood in silence, immersed in a puddle of soaked blushing buds - drowning. So I collected every bud, gently placing them in an empty fountain. Patiently I sat, embracing her; waiting for the winds to blow and take all her imperfect petals with them. But all they brought was a spiritless stench, haunting the air. As the mist cleared, a crow cried, perched upon a tree stump whose rotten roots lay amongst its once magnificent torso. So I placed all her branches into a barren river, hoping the rain would wash them away. But no rain fell. Now lost, I followed confused caterpillars crawling along a trail of blood. Upon journeys end; a breathless butterfly lay in slumber, So I placed my lips onto hers, but could not breathe life into her. To soothe her decaying wings, I built a cocoon, but only the caterpillars accepted sanctuary. Cracks crumbled her wings, preventing her from healing. Silent saffron sun awoke blackbirds, whose chorus of chants guided my mind away from the valley of misconception. So I left. Weeping. Unable to save her once magnificent garden from ruin.
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Maverick Avatar
January 6, 2022 at 9:26 AM
Hi Si, I gather there is some of life's experience In this piece? A poignant write well expressed.' All the new years best '
Duet Avatar
March 20, 2018 at 5:56 PM
So imaginative and mysterious, ZZ. It draws the reader into its gloomy mist searching for the secret garden and the lady who made it. Very interesting and sounds like a great intro to a book...and I love the music. It's so perfect for this poem.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 20, 2018 at 11:09 AM
This ones amazing. Another fav. "a naked cherry blossom tree stood in silence, immersed in a puddle of soaked blushing buds - drowning." Wow... I liked the image of the collection of buds in the empty fountain and the dark image of the caterpillars. Very interesting. Not all butterflies are beautiful. Always, Laura
Downing  Avatar
December 27, 2017 at 6:30 PM
Just came back to reread this and now one of my fave too!
Downing  Avatar
December 14, 2017 at 5:15 AM
...a weeping heartbroken soul of being helpless!
R. V. Avatar
December 12, 2017 at 7:01 PM
Deep in tone, dark in theme; a nice blend of the verbal and visual. Enjoyable, SO!
De Beaulieu Avatar
December 12, 2017 at 12:18 PM
Hello Silent One,this is a beautifully written sad poem. In my mind I can see the person weeping for the butterfly. Have a nice day my friend.
Ellison Avatar
December 11, 2017 at 8:24 PM
Beautiful imagery dear friend as I would expect from such a creative writer as you!!! Proud to be your Canadian Benny Hill!!! Good evening my dear British pal!
Teagan Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 10:14 PM
I understand that helpless feeling, the feeling of loss, our inability to save the rose petals from wilting. heartbreaking write.
One Avatar
December 8, 2017 at 6:18 AM
We can't save everyone... Thank you Becca...
Cresswell Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 10:45 AM
This write reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe's poetry. Very atmospheric; your words construct a place that is from a dream into reality.
One Avatar
December 8, 2017 at 6:17 AM
That is a wonderful compliment.. Thank you..
Ashley Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 8:50 PM
A deep, dramatic write Silent One of dark melancholy that is breathtaking in beautifully sad imagery. The stunning, stirring and haunting emotional mood is imbued by the poignant feelings you convey. A creative, magnificent, heartbreaking write that cries to be read once more..
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:27 AM
Thank you Susan..
Thayer Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 5:59 PM
I Love Dark Poetry. This Is An Unparalleled Piece Of Work, Silent One. Vickie
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:27 AM
Thank you Vickie..
Reese Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 7:18 AM
I followed you on your trippy journey. You use words like a Symbolist < un poet maudit > Excellent!
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:29 AM
Thank you Thresha..
Swartz Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 10:19 PM
Powerful sadness and and a feeling of total loss of control. Incredible words.
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:29 AM
Thank you James..
Roper Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 5:36 PM
Powerful and heartfelt <3 love it
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:30 AM
Thank you Eve..
Robinson Jr. Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 2:23 PM
Supreme sadness of enchanting melancholy imagery painted by your superb artistic pen, SO. An absolutely riveting poem. Breathtaking in it's dark emotional reverie. You work this poetic territory like no other. Great poem! Love and smiles always.
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:34 AM
Thank you Freddie..
Gupta Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 6:25 AM
Beautiful imagery to convey the theme of "rotten leaves among crushed rose petals - wilting" ... a wonderful read for me ... the music is deep and moving ... Which one to pay heed to, the reading or the listening appears unsolvable ...
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:34 AM
Thank you Probir..
Trifiatis Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 5:51 AM
Another example of your incomparable poetic ability my friend, Silent One!
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:36 AM
Thank you Demetrios..
Thomas Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 1:31 AM
...this takes my mind to so many different places. Truly unique.
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:36 AM
Thank you...
Lamoureux Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 5:17 PM
You have skills my friend. An enjoyable read.
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:36 AM
Thank you Richard..
Whitmore Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 3:53 PM
A ruined garden space filled with the haunting memory of an attempt saving. This poem is filled with such great personification of objects and places. I really enjoyed reading this! XO
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:37 AM
Thank you Kristina...
Dietrich Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 3:38 PM
this sad one is filled with beautiful descriptive words, Silent ONe. That is your forte, the use of beautiful phrasings.
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:39 AM
Thank you Andrea, you are right, for some reason, my sad poems seem to flow so much better... I could not give you an answer why....
Gentile Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 2:12 PM
a very poignant portrait of faded beauty and death yet also of the love which will go on, beautiful, Silent One!
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:40 AM
Thank you Mike..
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December 4, 2017 at 1:36 PM
- Heartbreaking ... beautiful and powerful - As always masterfully written, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:48 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise..
Onclaud Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:30 AM
what a stirring song from your pen; i love the sense of pathos all the way, S.)...huggs
One Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 8:53 AM
thank you Nette..
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