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Beyond her veil; eyes induced by secretive stars became drawn to a path illuminated by flickering, shimmering pale moonlight. Each spirited step led to the revelation of her secret garden. But upon arrival at her doorstep; disbelief disabled my soul's delight. Through the mist all I saw were rotten leaves among crushed rose petals - wilting. In shame, a naked cherry blossom tree stood in silence, immersed in a puddle of soaked blushing buds - drowning. So I collected every bud, gently placing them in an empty fountain. Patiently I sat, embracing her; waiting for the winds to blow and take all her imperfect petals with them. But all they brought was a spiritless stench, haunting the air. As the mist cleared, a crow cried, perched upon a tree stump whose rotten roots lay amongst its once magnificent torso. So I placed all her branches into a barren river, hoping the rain would wash them away. But no rain fell. Now lost, I followed confused caterpillars crawling along a trail of blood. Upon journeys end; a breathless butterfly lay in slumber, So I placed my lips onto hers, but could not breathe life into her. To soothe her decaying wings, I built a cocoon, but only the caterpillars accepted sanctuary. Cracks crumbled her wings, preventing her from healing. Silent saffron sun awoke blackbirds, whose chorus of chants guided my mind away from the valley of misconception. So I left. Weeping. Unable to save her once magnificent garden from ruin., The Silent One 4 December 2017

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Date: 1/6/2022 9:26:00 AM
Hi Si, I gather there is some of life's experience In this piece? A poignant write well expressed.' All the new years best '
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Date: 3/20/2018 5:56:00 PM
So imaginative and mysterious, ZZ. It draws the reader into its gloomy mist searching for the secret garden and the lady who made it. Very interesting and sounds like a great intro to a book...and I love the music. It's so perfect for this poem.
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Date: 3/20/2018 11:09:00 AM
This ones amazing. Another fav. "a naked cherry blossom tree stood in silence, immersed in a puddle of soaked blushing buds - drowning." Wow... I liked the image of the collection of buds in the empty fountain and the dark image of the caterpillars. Very interesting. Not all butterflies are beautiful. Always, Laura
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Date: 12/27/2017 6:30:00 PM
Just came back to reread this and now one of my fave too!
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Date: 12/14/2017 5:15:00 AM
...a weeping heartbroken soul of being helpless!
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Date: 12/12/2017 7:01:00 PM
Deep in tone, dark in theme; a nice blend of the verbal and visual. Enjoyable, SO!
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Date: 12/12/2017 12:18:00 PM
Hello Silent One,this is a beautifully written sad poem. In my mind I can see the person weeping for the butterfly. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 12/11/2017 8:24:00 PM
Beautiful imagery dear friend as I would expect from such a creative writer as you!!! Proud to be your Canadian Benny Hill!!! Good evening my dear British pal!
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Date: 12/7/2017 10:14:00 PM
I understand that helpless feeling, the feeling of loss, our inability to save the rose petals from wilting. heartbreaking write.
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Silent One
Date: 12/8/2017 6:18:00 AM
We can't save everyone... Thank you Becca...
Date: 12/7/2017 10:45:00 AM
This write reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe's poetry. Very atmospheric; your words construct a place that is from a dream into reality.
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Silent One
Date: 12/8/2017 6:17:00 AM
That is a wonderful compliment.. Thank you..
Date: 12/6/2017 8:50:00 PM
A deep, dramatic write Silent One of dark melancholy that is breathtaking in beautifully sad imagery. The stunning, stirring and haunting emotional mood is imbued by the poignant feelings you convey. A creative, magnificent, heartbreaking write that cries to be read once more..
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:27:00 AM
Thank you Susan..
Date: 12/6/2017 5:59:00 PM
I Love Dark Poetry. This Is An Unparalleled Piece Of Work, Silent One. Vickie
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:27:00 AM
Thank you Vickie..
Date: 12/6/2017 7:18:00 AM
I followed you on your trippy journey. You use words like a Symbolist < un poet maudit > Excellent!
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:29:00 AM
Thank you Thresha..
Date: 12/5/2017 10:19:00 PM
Powerful sadness and and a feeling of total loss of control. Incredible words.
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:29:00 AM
Thank you James..
Date: 12/5/2017 5:36:00 PM
Powerful and heartfelt <3 love it
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:30:00 AM
Thank you Eve..
Date: 12/5/2017 2:23:00 PM
Supreme sadness of enchanting melancholy imagery painted by your superb artistic pen, SO. An absolutely riveting poem. Breathtaking in it's dark emotional reverie. You work this poetic territory like no other. Great poem! Love and smiles always.
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:34:00 AM
Thank you Freddie..
Date: 12/5/2017 6:25:00 AM
Beautiful imagery to convey the theme of "rotten leaves among crushed rose petals - wilting" ... a wonderful read for me ... the music is deep and moving ... Which one to pay heed to, the reading or the listening appears unsolvable ...
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:34:00 AM
Thank you Probir..
Date: 12/5/2017 5:51:00 AM
Another example of your incomparable poetic ability my friend, Silent One!
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Demetrios..
Date: 12/5/2017 1:31:00 AM
...this takes my mind to so many different places. Truly unique.
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:36:00 AM
Thank you...
Date: 12/4/2017 5:17:00 PM
You have skills my friend. An enjoyable read.
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Richard..
Date: 12/4/2017 3:53:00 PM
A ruined garden space filled with the haunting memory of an attempt saving. This poem is filled with such great personification of objects and places. I really enjoyed reading this! XO
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:37:00 AM
Thank you Kristina...
Date: 12/4/2017 3:38:00 PM
this sad one is filled with beautiful descriptive words, Silent ONe. That is your forte, the use of beautiful phrasings.
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:39:00 AM
Thank you Andrea, you are right, for some reason, my sad poems seem to flow so much better... I could not give you an answer why....
Date: 12/4/2017 2:12:00 PM
a very poignant portrait of faded beauty and death yet also of the love which will go on, beautiful, Silent One!
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:40:00 AM
Thank you Mike..
Date: 12/4/2017 1:36:00 PM
- Heartbreaking ... beautiful and powerful - As always masterfully written, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:48:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise..
Date: 12/4/2017 10:30:00 AM
what a stirring song from your pen; i love the sense of pathos all the way, S.)...huggs
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Silent One
Date: 12/7/2017 8:53:00 AM
thank you Nette..
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