Prince

He tides me,
Like the moon stirs the seas-
Pulling me in, pushing me
Out,
Burying my feet in the sand
As if to say-

"I don't want you to go,
I don't want you to stay"

allusionbeautyconflictlovemoonfree verse

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Skat A

May 24, 2015 at 11:15 PM

LORA, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love

Lora Robinson

May 24, 2015 at 11:53 PM

Hey! Thank you, I'm proud to be featured only a month into my membership

Poet Destroyer A

May 13, 2015 at 12:25 PM

Lora, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@"

Poet Destroyer A

May 13, 2015 at 12:25 PM

p.s. nice and sweet

Debbie Guzzi

May 12, 2015 at 7:18 PM

Listening to what you said to Linda below I would tell you this piece is not fleshed out enough yet [and yes if a verse is on Soup most publishers will consider it published and a reprint] remember to let the reader know why you wrote this- you have give a single view of a lover and how he affects you- who is He? Prince? say Prince give your pronouns names.Why does he affect you this way? how? when? where? Light & love

Debbie Guzzi

May 13, 2015 at 11:27 AM

prehaps she meant not use HIS name - use a diverent name - even My Lover tides me like the moon stirs the sea - is better than He.

Lora Robinson

May 12, 2015 at 7:22 PM

And it's a reference to the movie Prince of Tides. My professor Nancy Mitchell-Ebert suggested I not use his name. I would love to inbox you pieces I am going to submit for publishing. For the poems I posting here I am not going to publish for a longtime.

Lora Robinson

May 12, 2015 at 7:20 PM

I'm not looking to publish this poem yet.

Skat A

May 12, 2015 at 3:06 PM

Lora, I have a prince in my life. LOL, and yes I am way to deep in sand to even want to leave.... Gosh, I love this... What happen to your first poem? Anyways, thank you for the visit... SKAT

Lora Robinson

May 12, 2015 at 3:31 PM

A PM suggested to not put my best work online because publishers want pieces relatively unread. It's my best piece so when it gets published I will post all of them again. For now I'm focusing on submitting pieces that need a lot of work shopping.

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