Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

Preventable

My eyelids droop my head begins to nod
I am struggling hard to stay awake
On a long drive in the pouring rain 
I feel I am being hypnotized 

I am struggling hard to stay awake
I turn the air conditioning on full blast
I feel like I am being hypnotized 
I will just close my eyes for a moment

I turn the air conditioning on full blast
Taking my hand off the wheel I slap my face
I will just close my eyes for a moment
As my car drifts I awake with a start

Taking my hand off the wheel I slap my face
I must be mad yet I need to get home
As my car drifts I awake with a start
I am no longer traveling on the road 

I must be mad yet I need to get home
The car is now beyond my control
I am no longer traveling on the road
In this moment there are no more choices

The car is now beyond my control
On a long drive in the pouring rain
In this moment there are no more choices
My eyelids droop my head begins to nod

On a long drive in the pouring rain
My life blood pours from my veins
My eyelids droop my head begins to nod
My life slowly yet quickly ebbs away

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Sara Kendrick July 6, 2013 at 9:15 AM Scary thoughts that you have penned..I hope not a happening in your life but just a work about the topic..Thanks for the visit to my work..Your opinion is important to me..Sara

Cherie Thomas July 6, 2013 at 7:11 AM Hi Rick!!! Theres such an intense feeling, reading each line, wondering whats next, really gets the heart pumping lol just a fantastic read, preventable. Its a honest truth, to not drive, when in that condition. a vital message in this poem!!! I also love your form of writing....a fascinating, joy to read....cheriex Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2013 at 7:32 AM Thanks Cherie, the poem I wrote for you is a modification of this form.

Andrea Dietrich July 3, 2013 at 1:35 PM wow, this is a powerful one, my friend. You are a poet to be reckoned with . GREAT use of poetry to get across an important message. Richard Lamoureux July 3, 2013 at 4:38 PM Thanks Andrea. Hugs Rick

Cecilia Macfarlane July 3, 2013 at 8:25 AM Powerful write Rick! The need to get home will never be realized....so sad. We all experienced this feeling, awesome job putting it into words. Hugs Richard Lamoureux July 3, 2013 at 8:47 AM Thanks Cecilia, hugs Rick

Ruby Honeytip July 3, 2013 at 4:20 AM I've always wanted to write in this form Richard. You have tackled such a dark and familiar scene with this one. Really impressive work.....Love Roobs xxx Richard Lamoureux July 3, 2013 at 5:25 AM You should give it a try, I am sure you would do well.

Donna Jones July 2, 2013 at 9:33 PM I hate it when this happens..getting so sleepy driving...you captured the experience well..let's hope we pull over before the last line..great job Richard Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 9:34 PM I use to drive a lot for work, I hate this feeling.

Colleen Bono July 2, 2013 at 3:48 PM This sadly happens everyday.Well done.I posted one for PD.Love Colleen Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 9:15 PM Good job on the poem Colleen.

Manel Gunatillake July 2, 2013 at 1:11 PM wow, you are really good in Pantoum form. You should have stopped for a while.. I wrote something may be I was little frustrated over some people behavior, read and let me know how you felt. Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 9:15 PM Thanks Manel.

Nette Onclaud July 2, 2013 at 12:12 PM wonderful drizzle of images taps this page, richard... incredibly done!..;) huggs Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 9:17 PM Thanks Nette, hugs back to you

Heather Ober July 2, 2013 at 8:14 AM WOW, Rick!! I know how difficult this form is, yet you made it look easy. Great topic choice as well. Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 9:20 PM Apparently the form is supposed to be obscure but I really like it. I also enjoy the terzanelle. If not for the soup I would be unfamiliar with all forms. This place has been my poetic Education.

Kim Van Breda July 2, 2013 at 7:24 AM Haven't we all experienced this dangerous phenomenon . Long distances with the obstinate determination to arrive ETA. The consequences could be disasterous. You have predicted this well in this Pantoum. Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 7:31 AM I had a friend who worked late fell asleep and drove into the back of a parked car. Fortunately he was okay.

Eileen Manassian July 2, 2013 at 3:55 AM May there NEVER happen to you, Richard. It truly disturbed me. Stay safe...drive carefully..... Richard Lamoureux July 2, 2013 at 6:18 AM No worries I will be careful.