Premonition At the River

Where a rustic bridge once crossed from my hometown in Iowa 
                                                                                  over to Illinois,
I used to go and play at a spot     
                   where children’s feet ran helter skelter through sand.

It was long, so long ago. 
                 In summer’s dusk, I held on to one of the park’s swings.
 
With feet pumping, I lifted into the air; 
                                  it was as if I almost flew above the water.

The Mississippi River had become a long grey ribbon
                                                         beneath the darkening sky.

What strange gloom flowed over me 
                            while all of those around me were so happy?

I sit here in this park fifty-some years later, 
                                                        and it dawns on me -

My childhood foreboding was a premonition 
                               of the very way I’m feeling    
                                                               right here and now.


for Mark Toney's 
2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 27 Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Kendrick Avatar
September 19, 2015 at 8:47 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
Bayles Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 5:46 PM
I like the imagery of this poem. I have lived most of my life in Iowa near the Mississippi.
Haight Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:49 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your win. I like the way you contrast the unburdened, carefree fun of youth with how the same circumstance is interpreted in mature years. Very melancholy. Sandra
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September 14, 2015 at 1:31 PM
Andrea, congrats on placing in Nette's awesome contest. SKAT
Lawless Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 9:09 AM
Very nicely done Andrea. Those recurring "dreams", glimpses into the other side of happiness Congrats on the placement.
Nunez Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 5:15 AM
I like this Andie. Elegance in the melancholic lines. Congratulations! hugs!
Onclaud Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:25 AM
this is beautiful, andie... i wish we had more images on the sense of taste.. a glory in my heart..thank you for joining my contest and warm congrats!
Dietrich Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 5:40 PM
I did not even realize I was supposed to be doing taste. Nette, my mind is going bonkers today. I just started writing and this took over me and I am so happy you inspired me. THANK YOU
A. Sharma Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:00 AM
Congrats on ur superb winning write Andrea!
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 13, 2015 at 6:47 AM
This poem has a haunting melancholic feeling to it Andrea. A wonderful entry for the contest.
Kendrick Avatar
September 12, 2015 at 5:50 PM
Eerie feeling to think that you are feeling today what you felt as a child..Enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
Anish Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 11:07 PM
Eerie and mist enshrouded feeling in this work. Can we ever know what the future holds? You suggest we can! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Martin Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 10:41 PM
Am stunned with the light gravity of you poem. Takes me back to a childhood memory of m y own that presaged a later life feeling!
Ober Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 7:47 AM
Oh my goodness, this is an instant favourite for me. I love poems (and any story really) in which the narrator returns to a place from childhood - stories steeped in nostalgia and revelation. You amaze me!
A. Sharma Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 2:38 AM
Wonderful images you leave here Andrea! Gl in contest!
Tor Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 2:00 AM
Nicely done Andrea. Images bring you back. Music does to, and fragrances. You hear a song and you reflect on the time it was first out. Smelling burnt leaves, I think of late October around our home in the country. The images brought back the memories...
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
September 10, 2015 at 1:16 AM
A poem with an imagery biting melancholy... =") I like the feet pumping then you go with this line lifted into the air.. strong then light.. =')~Olive ELoisa
Lindley Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 7:50 PM
Revisit the past and either happiness prevails or sadness and gloom invade . I should know, having done so a few dozen times in this my 6th decade. Great poem , very solid 7. Good luck in that contest my friend!
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September 9, 2015 at 7:47 PM
Deja vu my poetic friend...and as artists, our deja vu is quite stronger and covers lifes span! Great write Andrea! I left a message for you in your face book messages...I hope that you read it...have a wonderful new year my friend!....much love, james
Beaufort Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:58 PM
Time goes by all too quickly. We know that now. You write about a range of very majestic thoughts in your poems. There is a lot of wisdom expressed in your words. And so, may I thank you for evenings philosophy and entertainment? You are indeed a presence that is somewhat magical.
Beaufort Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:52 PM
There is nothing so interesting as a time warp. And yes, it is a wise one that knows the toll that time will take.
Dietrich Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:53 PM
thanks, frederic, for being one of the first to read my poems. and YOU GOT THE MESSAGE.
Dietrich Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:53 PM
Duke, my message to frederic just jumped up to your box. Sorry about that. you got my message too!!!
Parker Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:51 PM
Deep..very deep..this seemed sad to me, whether it is the change of a place once filled with life or childhood memories where fantasy becomes a shadow as we age and the world becomes real.My first thoughts after reading.
Dietrich Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 6:53 PM
thanks, frederic, for being one of the first to read my poems. and YOU GOT THE MESSAGE.
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