Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Poet Shape

Praying For a Flat

The wheels
                                in the brain         and round
                            go round                       and round
                        and round                           and round
                      and round                               and round
                     and round                                 and round
                    and round              o   O              and round
                     and round                                 and round
                      and round                               and round
                        and round                           and round
                           and round                     go round
                                and round           in the brain
                                                The wheels










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    This piece, I believe, is my finest shape poem to date. However simple, with the wheel there is an implied spinning motion, the hub providing a sense of a third dimension, and together they create the impression of an exasperated face~ stuck, in the "round and round and round..." of obsessive thought patterns.

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Richard Lamoureux May 14, 2019 at 7:34 AM Ha ha, cute response. :0) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 14, 2019 at 7:52 AM ;o)

Gershon Wolf May 12, 2019 at 11:49 AM Things are 'shaping up' for this winner now. Congrats on moving up a bit with this one in Richard's contest, Maureen! Best wishes, Gershon Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 12, 2019 at 1:14 PM Rolling along ;) singing my song... over and over and over xomo!

Jan Allison May 12, 2019 at 11:19 AM It definitely merits a high place Mo, so glad it placed in Rick's contest, knowing of your injury it is a very moving piece in many ways :-) hugs Jan xx Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 12, 2019 at 1:13 PM Now I'm emotional... ;) thank You dear! xomo <3

Richard Lamoureux May 12, 2019 at 9:33 AM A lot of work went into this one. Well deserving of a high placement. Congrats and thanks for entering my contest. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 12, 2019 at 1:12 PM Thank you so much Rick! I'm thrilled just to take it out for a spin ;) xomo!

Jeff Connelly March 14, 2019 at 10:02 AM AMAZING!!! I really like the eyes in the center, or should I say o O's. This is simply brilliant Maureen. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart March 14, 2019 at 10:30 AM Admiring my hub ;) Thank you my friend! xomo

Matthew Anish December 19, 2018 at 8:56 PM The wheels are always turning in the cranium. The trick is to find a way to slow them down now and then. Very clever work here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 20, 2018 at 8:28 AM Spinning or skidding ;) Thank you Matthew, xomo!

Marugu Mo December 18, 2018 at 12:58 AM Nice artwork! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 20, 2018 at 8:14 AM Thank you Marugu :) xomo

Line Gauthier December 16, 2018 at 4:21 PM I'm dizzy! LOL A fun poem, Maureen. Congrats. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 20, 2018 at 8:14 AM Thank you Line ;)) xomo!

Beata Agustin December 16, 2018 at 6:32 AM Congratulations. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 16, 2018 at 8:09 AM Thank you so much Beata, bless you, xomo

Jan Allison December 15, 2018 at 6:56 PM dropping back with my congrats Mo:-) hugs jan xx Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 16, 2018 at 8:11 AM Thank you Jan :) love n' hugs! xomo

Anne-Lise Andresen December 15, 2018 at 4:09 PM - Congratulations on your great shape poem, Maureen :) - I wish you a peaceful and beautiful Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 16, 2018 at 8:10 AM Thank you, and you and yours Anne-Lise :) xomo!

Eve Roper December 15, 2018 at 1:03 PM Congratulations on your placement, Maureen. I thank you for entering my contest Shapes. Hugs Eve ~`*, Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 16, 2018 at 7:43 AM Thank you so much Eve! Warm hugs and well wishes <3 xomo

CayCay Godwin December 13, 2018 at 7:49 AM You are such a unique, individuated individual - I always wake up reading you and delight in what I find. Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 13, 2018 at 8:33 AM What a wonderful thing to say! Thank you CayCay :))) my muse silent as of late, your words especially encouraging <3 xomo

Gershon Wolf December 12, 2018 at 10:15 PM MUCH better than that tired old ditty about the wheels on the bus going round and round. Two thumbs up, my friend! :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 13, 2018 at 8:27 AM Lol! You know that tune was in my head, started writing it verbatim ;) thank you sweetness! xomo

Constance La France December 12, 2018 at 5:30 AM Maureen, great shape poem, these shape poems take so much time to create, well done ! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 12, 2018 at 8:11 AM Thank you Constance! I had the idea for this for a while, had worked it out for another that became a sphere. I love the nit-picky-ness! Had the loop perfect but tweaked to bring out face, stanzas and action. xomo!

Jan Allison December 11, 2018 at 4:29 PM what a fun shape poem Mo - found a nail in my tyre recently I was not impressed when i got the repair bill:-( hugs Jan xx Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 12, 2018 at 7:58 AM Thank you! No doubt. I don't drive but O' bike flats. The frozen fingers. Don't miss those ;) though I eventually found the best tires, put them on in the fall, would not get a flat till spring. I like to think I'll never have another flat :)) xomo

Vegter Papyrus December 11, 2018 at 4:29 PM Just keep rolling until the wheels fall off. I wrote one awhile ago trying to explain my brain process also. I compared it to a school of fish changing direction synchronized. Thisil is a good way to look at it too. Nice! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 12, 2018 at 8:04 AM Hah! I love the image that congers ;)) thank you K xomo!

Silent One December 10, 2018 at 12:12 PM Oooh.. that made my eyes dizzy.. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 10, 2018 at 1:33 PM Ha! Awesome ;))) xomo!

Arthur Vaso December 9, 2018 at 11:24 PM Hope you fix this flat soon, so you get back here with a new poem!!!!! :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 10, 2018 at 9:08 AM Heh heh ;) Will rough up the muse, see if I can't make something stick <3

Michelle Faulkner December 9, 2018 at 4:22 PM Hope you carry a spare :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 9, 2018 at 10:10 PM ...a patch kit ;)

Bernard Chan December 9, 2018 at 8:06 AM Possibly the best use of the Shape form I've seen so far. Ingenious. Love it. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 9, 2018 at 8:19 AM Thank you Bernard! The idea had been rolling around in my brain a while but couldn't think what to write ;) xomo!

Ravi Sathasivam December 9, 2018 at 1:22 AM Excellent. Interesting write and cleverly done. Enjoyed reading it. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 9, 2018 at 7:58 AM Thank you Ravi! :) xomo

Anna Hopper December 8, 2018 at 8:35 AM Oh my gosh! Right? Please give me a flat! Great job, friend! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 8, 2018 at 9:19 AM Lol! You got it ;) xomo!

Demetrios Trifiatis December 8, 2018 at 5:32 AM Witty, dearest Maureen! I had to follow you round and round and round and....! What a joy, lol! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 8, 2018 at 7:49 AM Aha ;)) I thought cyclists might like this one <3 xomo!

Harry Horsman December 7, 2018 at 3:44 PM Wow, so clever, and skilful. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 8, 2018 at 7:47 AM Thank you Harry! :)) xomo

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