Poor Sense

P erception, direction intention, ( lets make spiritual ) earthly..' 
O wow..' saving their strength maybe? well maybe..'
O utlaw carriage rides, in N Y C, horses would have more time; 4 T V..?
R egulation in school legislate against.. Against.?  hazards in play..?

S ave the wretched flesh from toil, ( really ?) (really?) 
E gregious intervention, yes that's it..' let people stay months in their bed
N ot to long till the muscles waste in legs, (hey why not live without living)
S ave mankind from any labour, obesity... Is just the resulting flavour
E quine mammals enjoy moderate labour, D N A I'm sure will agree..'

copyright Joe Maverick.co.uk
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Makama Avatar
October 13, 2015 at 7:24 AM
longest time friend. You've just exhibited to the highest quality exactly what I have missed in here for months. Your lines are so exciting and your words are each having that second hand of drawing me back to them again and again and again irrespective of how many times I have gone through them. Its nice to be home and you are part of the reason I have this refreshing feeling. A definite 7. Cheers!
Horne Avatar
May 10, 2015 at 5:08 PM
love this thoughtful write, Joe. Hope you've had a good weekend and that your week will be a great one : )
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:58 AM
very beautifully crafted piece joe full of home truths excellent pen wishing you a lovely week
Dietrich Avatar
March 21, 2015 at 10:12 PM
hey,there, just saying hello back to ya. I need to hurry and open another contest. Wish me luck!!
Kendrick Avatar
February 23, 2015 at 11:45 AM
Congrats on your featured poem.…...Sara
Austin Avatar
February 23, 2015 at 10:20 AM
Yes, poor sense fits most of interaction on the social scene. Congrats on the selection. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
February 23, 2015 at 10:23 AM
Need of a little explanation, JOe. Love, daver
Kimathi Avatar
February 23, 2015 at 9:59 AM
A wonderful acrostic, that fuses with the title! Nice penning Joe!
Abdelfatah Avatar
February 22, 2015 at 2:14 PM
Very good! It's well written and it's also very interesting (and very true).
Devnath  Avatar
February 22, 2015 at 10:58 AM
Very interesting poem read from you. I loved much your three words "live without living" a poor sense indeed. Beautifully penned. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
Lamoureux Avatar
February 11, 2015 at 4:26 PM
I find this piece very interesting! Bravo.
Horne Avatar
January 29, 2015 at 4:06 PM
very clever write here, Joe
Peranteau Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 11:45 AM
Hey Joe, great Acrostic! I just want to throw my 3 cents in, in regard the plight of our equine friends who labor for our enjoyment. And please don't get me wrong here; I am from Philly, and we have carrage rides as well, yet recently my thoughts have taken a drastic turn. I just learned yesterday that three mammals suffer from,emphysema; humans, bovine and yes, you guessed it,horses ! That carbon monoxide cars produce, cause much of it in horses. They just get shot,no oxygen like us. Much love
Maverick Avatar
January 24, 2015 at 12:28 PM
Thanks for the heads up James, writing this I was thinking of the primary route being through central park, correct if I am wrong my friend.' I would also consider the Horses being valuable to the owners would have 'care' as par 'f t c' I speaking as a man of 'former' strength, enjoyed exertion and had one morning woken to 'salt grit' on my forehead and content.' from a prior days heavy exercise, so I would think the horses would also relish flexing muscles, many thanks for the visit dear friend..'
Dietrich Avatar
January 10, 2015 at 5:33 PM
this one is very clever. A GREAT and timely message in it. So glad to see a new post from you!!! Great job.
Kendrick Avatar
January 10, 2015 at 4:59 PM
Cute one..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..I believe that some would enjoy a life without physical labor though..Sara
Yvonne Avatar
January 10, 2015 at 7:14 AM
Interesting piece and successful I would say. I am now interested in reading about this issue. I had not heard of it.
Austin Avatar
January 4, 2015 at 9:27 AM
I don't understand your comment. No offense, but I don't send any but my e-mail address to anyone. Hope you had a good new year. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
January 3, 2015 at 9:49 AM
Just a line to wish you a happy new year. Love, Dave
Austin Avatar
December 30, 2014 at 10:40 AM
Obesity. A real modern problem - not only health wise but mind wise also. Are we a society that must be entertained, and by loud music as well. Good to hear from you Joe. Love, daver
Horne Avatar
December 28, 2014 at 9:32 AM
Thought provoking piece, Joe - hope you had a wonderful Xmas
Horsman Avatar
December 28, 2014 at 5:41 AM
Love your take on today Joe...Happy New Year
Maverick Avatar
December 28, 2014 at 7:23 AM
Hey there Harry thanks for the new year wish, and for the comment, I find peoples ideas of What's for the better quite misguided (sometimes) I dashed this off after seeing the plight of the horse cab owners in central park N Y C, Its a bit thrown together and I changed a few words, yet its a honest enough off the cuff appraisal..'
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