Poetic Gist

Poetry is the air I breathe,
  lifeblood trickling 'tween
    luscious marrow in my bones,
existentially rooted crux reflecting  
Amen's utterances & hallelujah certainties
    'round reality's technical formalities
   foreshadowing furthermost prevalence 
       of comprehensive earthy assumptions
            & defining whispered whimsies, 
  exhaled betwixt sunrise's saturated ache 
     for fiery transpired virtual presence,  
        literally composed of complicit
  synchronicity resoundingly set ablaze
        mid expounded otherworldly desires

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/27/2016 4:08:00 PM

Lovely complexities in your visually stunning poem, Paloma. You cover the panoramic scope of emotions/consciousness overlaid on the sensory grandeur of our universe. A very daunting task that was carried out to poetic perfection, at least as far as I could tell. Fabulous writing, lady. Much love to you. RW

White Wolf

Date: 10/26/2016 8:32:00 PM

Tha soup has come alive since your arrival Paloma. And this gem is the reason why. A great piece from a great poetess.

Paloma P
Date: 10/27/2016 4:01:00 AM

What a sweet thing to say, thanks so much Rick!

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/26/2016 5:13:00 PM

Hi Paloma, I really enjoyed this write. It was a well crafted piece. You made poetry come alive in a sensual yet tactful way. Although you wrote more than ten lines, if this was submitted to my " poetry "contest it would have most definitely made it on the winning list. Because I felt every word. A without doubt seven:-) Alexis

Paloma P
Date: 10/26/2016 5:54:00 PM

Actually, I originally had that in mind, but I couldn't edit to save my life! :) Thanks so much Alexis.