Please Can You Come

The moons have disappeared in the fluffy clouds For I have seen them leave. I surely think that you would come My heart seems to believe. I imagine that I can fly to you And bring you back on my dainty wings. I hear that you live in a land ashore, Which is full of queens and kings. But, what do you really do Dad? Is it something that I don’t know. I have grown up big - mummy said:) tell me your secret in a voice very low. When I close my eyes I see of you, For a while till you say goodbye. And I open my eyes as fast as I can Somehow, to make truth out of a lie. It is a day of joy when I wait for you, Imagining the gifts you would bring. But it is the way you call me sweetly, That makes my heart really sing. Please can you come… Everyday and Everywhere… It doesn’t make sense without you here.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 7/29/2014 2:26:00 PM
Shadaab, thank you for the reply
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Date: 7/9/2014 3:43:00 PM
A beautiful, emotional tribute to your father, Shadaab - no wonder it is on the winners' list! Congratulations!
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:01:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind comments! I cant believe that my feelings had so much power.
Date: 6/19/2014 1:00:00 PM
This is such a heartfelt poem no wonder it wins. Congratz!
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Doris Jamoner
Date: 7/30/2014 9:31:00 AM
Please do continue to write more. I would be happy to read it : )
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:02:00 PM
You are very kind Doris. I hope I can continue to write more.
Date: 6/15/2014 3:13:00 PM
touched my heart, dear Shadaab. elaine
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:03:00 PM
Thank you Elaine! Pleased to see your very encouraging comments for my poem. Much appreciated
Date: 6/13/2014 10:09:00 AM
Love it.. Beautifully done.
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:04:00 PM
Thank you for your lovely comment!
Date: 6/12/2014 9:14:00 PM
Very heart felt poem! Congrad's on your winning verse. Light & Love
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:06:00 PM
Hi Debbie. Thank you for the comment. I am pleased that you liked it.
Date: 6/12/2014 6:46:00 AM
Congrats, Shadaab.. Such a touching write.. I, as you wonder what loved ones who have gone are experiencing. I think it is a beauty and love our human minds could not withstand.. Hugs... Arlene..
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:07:00 PM
Thank you Arlene. I am glad you like it and yes humans are weak and isolated. They need love and those sweet emotions.
Date: 6/11/2014 10:20:00 PM
Shadaab, Congratulations, a wonderful and heartfelt win. Love ~LINDA
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:07:00 PM
Very kind of you to have liked my poem.
Date: 6/10/2014 7:27:00 PM
heartwarming call to a sweet father, shadaab... a greeat win!.. huggs
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:08:00 PM
Thank you so much!
Date: 6/10/2014 6:41:00 PM
Oh a treasure of a poem, I wish I could give you a big hug, what a way of words and emotions. Very well done :)
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:09:00 PM
Thank you so much. I am so glad that you have liked my writing. Much appreciated and a big HUG!!!
Date: 6/10/2014 2:19:00 PM
Such a lovely tribute to dad Mumtaz !! A longing to see him everytime everywhere,, that's what I also feel ,, congrats on great win !.
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Date: 6/10/2014 9:18:00 AM
Beautiful and bittersweet..congrats on your win Shaddab! love, Deb
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Deb Wilson
Date: 6/10/2014 9:19:00 AM
sorry I just realized I misspelled your name!
Date: 6/9/2014 10:49:00 PM
Nicely done. congrats on the win, Shaddab
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Shadaab Mumtaz
Date: 7/26/2014 5:11:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments. I am glad that you have liked my poem.
Date: 6/9/2014 7:15:00 PM
Congratulations, Shadaab, on your top win.
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Date: 6/9/2014 6:58:00 PM
Worthy of the number 1 it received. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/30/2012 7:38:00 PM
A yearning....artfully presented! Shadaab! Jimbo
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Date: 4/12/2012 12:26:00 PM
A beautiful poem, Shadaab -Very touching indeed. I was deeply moved. Thanks Shadaab, for your very kind feelings on my poem The Wound. I am deeply touched
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Date: 2/25/2012 4:34:00 PM
A beautiful and touching poem Shadaab. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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