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Pitiless

A lonesome night soon fades away Into indifferent rays of daylight Towards a shallow, dusty pathway Of fear and twisted delight The crystalline emotions flutter Within a heart of stony fleck The noises make me shutter As I tread this lonely, ACHING trek You whispered something in my ear I was thinking all the while The words I simply couldn't hear As I tried to switch on a smile The night keeps leaving its deathly lustre All around my tortured soul The courage I try to muster Is never enough...NOTHING...I am dull I am useless, I am master-less I am helpless...and with the mask of happiness - PITILESS.

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Stephen Kilmer

Date: 9/25/2013 6:29:00 PM

We all feel this way at times (sometime more than we should) but you my dear friend are true gem. You have a gift for poetry and writing. That is your strength. Use it to your advantage. Hang in there. ~ Kilmer

Don Johnson

Date: 4/2/2012 6:14:00 PM

in truth we sometimes linger here, when darkest words compel, thoughts are whispered in my ear, muttered thoughts dispel, remembered passion lingers still, where loving eyes were held, the Dingo at the moon it howls, and breaks a sombre spell... Thank you Laura Breidenthal "Pitiless" Don

Chuck Novotny

Date: 3/30/2012 10:59:00 PM

This mask of happiness becomes a burden too great to bear at times. And in poetry we find release. You touch my heart tonight. Thank you. - Chuck

Walayee Poet Lay Whitlock-Ishway

Date: 3/28/2012 11:36:00 AM

WOW! Powerful write Laura. Evokes so much despair...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/27/2012 8:52:00 PM

AWEEE Laura, this is deep... right now smiling is hard for me.. I'm gonna ask... are you OK!... you have me on that nothing again... for some reason,,,my lonesome nights stay, as the morning arrives..i can't find myself right now SHHHH! enjoyed your poem.. forever PD

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/27/2012 9:10:00 AM

So much profoundness here, you are alway a joy to read Laura.

Michael Smith

Date: 3/27/2012 7:03:00 AM

This made me shutter amid this powerful vesrse. I have experienced these emotion and it is frightening. Please read my Days of Sunless.

Dan Kearley

Date: 3/27/2012 1:31:00 AM

Really? You are pitiless?Hmmm? But I don't believe the things you think you are. :o) Pity comes from within your heart.If you feel you have none?Something has caused you to block this...???Very heartfelt write..