Pitiless

A lonesome night soon fades away
Into indifferent rays of daylight
Towards a shallow, dusty pathway
Of fear and twisted delight
The crystalline emotions flutter
Within a heart of stony fleck
The noises make me shutter
As I tread this lonely, ACHING trek
You whispered something in my ear
I was thinking all the while
The words I simply couldn't hear
As I tried to switch on a smile
The night keeps leaving its deathly lustre 
All around my tortured soul
The courage I try to muster
Is never enough...NOTHING...I am dull
I am useless, I am master-less
I am helpless...and with the mask of happiness -

PITILESS.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 9/25/2013 6:29:00 PM
We all feel this way at times (sometime more than we should) but you my dear friend are true gem. You have a gift for poetry and writing. That is your strength. Use it to your advantage. Hang in there. ~ Kilmer
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Date: 4/2/2012 6:14:00 PM
in truth we sometimes linger here, when darkest words compel, thoughts are whispered in my ear, muttered thoughts dispel, remembered passion lingers still, where loving eyes were held, the Dingo at the moon it howls, and breaks a sombre spell... Thank you Laura Breidenthal "Pitiless" Don
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Date: 3/30/2012 10:59:00 PM
This mask of happiness becomes a burden too great to bear at times. And in poetry we find release. You touch my heart tonight. Thank you. - Chuck
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Date: 3/28/2012 11:36:00 AM
WOW! Powerful write Laura. Evokes so much despair...
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Date: 3/27/2012 8:52:00 PM
AWEEE Laura, this is deep... right now smiling is hard for me.. I'm gonna ask... are you OK!... you have me on that nothing again... for some reason,,,my lonesome nights stay, as the morning arrives..i can't find myself right now SHHHH! enjoyed your poem.. forever PD
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Date: 3/27/2012 9:10:00 AM
So much profoundness here, you are alway a joy to read Laura.
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Date: 3/27/2012 7:03:00 AM
This made me shutter amid this powerful vesrse. I have experienced these emotion and it is frightening. Please read my Days of Sunless.
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Date: 3/27/2012 1:31:00 AM
Really? You are pitiless?Hmmm? But I don't believe the things you think you are. :o) Pity comes from within your heart.If you feel you have none?Something has caused you to block this...???Very heartfelt write..
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