Susan Ashley Poet Couplet

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December 22, 2023

~ Second Place ~
Contest: Retrospective 2024
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ First Place ~
Contest: Anacreontic Couplets
Sponsor: Silent One
Syllables confirmed: howmanysyllables.com

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Pink Champagne and Satin Opera Gloves

As wild as unbridled seas,
soft as mist, a spindrift tease. 
Night stars swoon and fall from skies; 
constellations fill her eyes. 
Every leaf stirs in her wake, 
bottom to top, mountains quake.
Beaux like grapes bunch on her vine, 
blood in veins she turns to wine.
Kisses sipped, her cherry lips. 
Saké nip, rock ‘n roll hips;
tongue-and-groove celebration,
sensual saturation. 
Her riptide lures sand from shore, 
tsunami, when she wants more.

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Greg Gaul July 16, 2026 at 1:36 PM Masterful rhyming as we breeze through this metaphorical mindscape. So well done. But could we expect less? Nay, nay dear bards. This is a special poet.

Howard Kerr July 13, 2026 at 6:06 AM Hello Susan, I am delighted that this monumental work has been selected again. An endorsement of your splendid talent, your word craft, and aptitude for scene setting in every environment. Hats off to you. Howard

Sara Kendrick January 8, 2025 at 5:02 AM Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K Susan Ashley January 9, 2025 at 8:34 AM Dear Sara, thank you for your gracious visit and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Marilene Evans January 2, 2025 at 10:01 AM Congratulations, Susan! What a fantastic write about a woman, who can be wild and at the next moment soft, which is easily done in dancing in the same song for rhythm and tempo change. Or the sensuality of a woman, tamed, but confident or lures with fire in her eyes and body. Happy New Year! Susan Ashley January 3, 2025 at 7:11 AM Dear Marilene, the vibrant spirit of your comments captures the vivacious feminine energy portrayed in my poem. I'm so happy to know you enjoyed this verse. Thank you for sharing in the adventure of this woman who "lures with fire in her eyes and body" and also for your kind congrats. Your lovely presence is uplifting, my poet friend. Warmest wishes for a wonderful 2025.. ~Susan

Beata Agustin December 31, 2024 at 2:25 AM Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing this. May God bless you with a prosperous New Year. Susan Ashley December 31, 2024 at 7:36 AM Dear Beata, your visit is a delight and your comments are uplifting. Thank you, my friend, for your lovely encouragement and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Evelyn Judy Buehler February 29, 2024 at 4:46 PM An amazing, elegantly beautiful poem, my friend. Much enjoyed! Blessings. Susan Ashley March 2, 2024 at 7:26 AM Dear Evelyn, soulful poetess and gifted friend, I relish your lovely response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Schatz February 28, 2024 at 11:34 PM So many great lines: "Beaux like grapes bunch on her vine" "Saké nip, rock ‘n roll hips" She is a powerful female entity, this one. A literal force of nature. Thank you for the introduction to Anacreontic Couplets. Susan Ashley March 2, 2024 at 7:32 AM Dear Robert, indeed, the heroine of my poem is a potent force of nature! Thank you for seeing beauty in strength and for sharing your insightful thoughts with me. I was introduced to Anacreontic Couplets by a contest hosted by Silent One, and I found it to be a wonderful form to write in. You should definitely give it a try. Your verse would be framed perfectly within it. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paghunda Zahid January 15, 2024 at 9:40 AM Absolutely beautiful... purely aesthetic Susan Ashley January 17, 2024 at 6:35 PM Dear Paghunda, your visit is a delight and your comments are uplifting. Thank you, my friend, for your lovely encouragement. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Frederic Parker January 12, 2024 at 7:28 PM as wild as unbridled seas, soft as mist a spindrift tease, night stars swoon and fall from skies, constellations fill her eyes...dear friend, dear poet that is poetry, that is first class poetry...congratulations dear poet, dear friend Susan Ashley January 17, 2024 at 6:32 PM Dear friend, dear poet, your visit is a delight! Thank you for your encouraging words and kind congrats. I am humbled and honored, Frederic. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands January 11, 2024 at 11:59 AM This flows so well. Congratulations! :) Susan Ashley January 12, 2024 at 7:41 AM Dear Heidi, it's wonderful to see you and know that you are feeling better. Thank you for your lovely comment and kind congrats. Warmest wishes for a happy and healthy new year.. ~Susan

Malabika Ray Choudhury January 7, 2024 at 2:29 PM Congratulations, Susan. Stunning and gorgeous - Each couplet is a gem in itself! Your images, phrases, word-choices never fail to amaze me - an example of superb creative writing! Susan Ashley January 7, 2024 at 5:13 PM Dearest Mala, my soulful poetry friend, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your uplifting presence and encouraging comments. Your wonderful words and kind congrats are an honor to receive. Your poetic friendship is held in my deepest appreciation. Warmest wishes to you for a happy and inspiring 2024.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich January 7, 2024 at 8:38 AM Gorgeous writing. A well deserved win. Susan Ashley January 7, 2024 at 4:58 PM Dear Andrea, it's an honor to receive your wonderful comment seeing as I so admire your exceptional poetry. Thank you for your gracious visit and for your kindness. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Howard Kerr January 5, 2024 at 9:08 PM Susan, Your contest entry displays a superior command of creative couplet writing and precise scene capture and depiction. Smooth and seamless transition between lines. Elegant word choice. Congratulations. In turn I’m honoured by your flattering review of my piece which I will use for growth. Heartfelt thanks. Happy New Year Howard Susan Ashley January 7, 2024 at 5:09 PM Dear Howard, thank you for the depth and breadth of your wonderful comments. Your poetic presence is encouraging and uplifting. I hold your warm congrats and genuine kindness in my truest appreciation. Your poem for the contest " Rapid Urban Belt" is a vibrant creative poem. I enjoyed re-reading it immensely. It reminded me of NYC but I guess the imagery could apply to the hustle bustle of any big city. A remarkable piece of art my friend. Warmest wishes for a happy and inspiring new year.. ~Susan

Sotto Poet January 5, 2024 at 7:29 PM Your poetic prowess knows no bounds, as evidenced by this gorgeous poem. The adept use of vivid imagery, and boundless imagination is truly wonderful, dear Susan. It is a daunting task to begin extolling this exquisite gem. Your masterful depiction of metaphors and impeccable choice of words add a layer of beauty to this poem. Certain verses within this opus have resounded deeply within my heart "Night stars swoon and fall from skies; constellations fill her eyes. Hearty congrats on your win Susan Ashley January 7, 2024 at 4:53 PM Dear Lasaad, I'm thrilled and honored to receive your wondrous comments, your thoughts about my poem are deep and rich. Your appreciation for my poem is held in my highest regard since I admire your poetry so, with your masterful use of metaphor and vibrant imagery as you deftly weave intriguing gems. Thank you, my friend, for your warm congrats and genuine kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues January 3, 2024 at 7:21 PM Quite a rollick! Congratulations on your win, Susan! Susan Ashley January 5, 2024 at 5:20 PM Dear Kim, rollick is a great word for sure lol! Thank you for your wonderful comment and kind congrats. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Marilene Evans January 3, 2024 at 10:27 AM Congratulations on your win. Wow, how wonderful this is...rock 'n roll hips; tongue-and-groove celebration, sensual saturation... this is definitely dance in my corner... only I'm not really pond of champagne and sake... apple martini would do it for me...lol Susan Ashley January 5, 2024 at 5:19 PM Dear Marilene, knowing how much you like to dance I'm not surprised those lines resonated with you! :) Ohh, an apple martini sounds delish.. let's raise a glass.. cheers! lol! Thank you for your wonderful comments and kind congrats my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

I Am Anaya January 1, 2024 at 9:46 PM Congratulations Susan, you are a free-spirited poetess. Just stunning, breath taking. Wow. Way to start the New Year! Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 7:16 PM Dear Anaya, your kind congrats and wonderful thoughts are a delight to receive. Thank you dear soulful poetess. Your heart and poetic talent shines. Warmest wishes for a happy new year.. ~Susan

Unseeking Seeker January 1, 2024 at 8:42 PM Terrific! Got to fav this one, Susan! Warmest congratulations on your win. Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 7:15 PM Dear US, thank you for your uplifting visit and kind congrats. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my poem. The honor of your fav is truly appreciated, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One January 1, 2024 at 10:53 AM Only you could write a poem so brilliant as this, with great imagery and wonderful flow and imagination.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 7:13 PM Dear Silent One, I'm delighted to receive your wonderful comments and kind congrats. Thank you for your sponsorship of such a wonderful contest, I enjoyed the poetic challenge. I'm honored by my placement on your list and thrilled to share the podium with such gifted poets and poetesses. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich December 28, 2023 at 8:46 AM Excellent personification, Susan Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:42 PM Thank you, dear Andrea, for your wonderful visit and kind words. warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Anitha Jayasankar December 25, 2023 at 11:44 PM Dearest Susan, I really admire your intelligence in crafting such a splendid verse so rich with metaphors apt for the title and the sensual touch adds to the beauty... What others mentioned below, I don't want to repeat, and perfect punctuations, I would add. Wishing you merry Christmas and happy holidays my dear sweet poetic friend. Hugs... ~ Ani Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:40 PM Dearest Ani, it's so wonderful to see you! I'm honored by your inspiring comments, they are received with joy and appreciation, my sweet poetry friend. I hope you had a merry Christmas. Warmest wishes to you and yours for a happy new year filled with light, peace and inspiration. Hugs.. ~Susan

Charles Messina December 24, 2023 at 9:08 AM Susan, what a gorgeous write, each line prettier than the other. Although, you probably don't need it...BOL in the contest! Wishing you and yours a wonderful Christmas and Healthy and Happy New Year! Warmest Wishes.. Charlie Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:36 PM Dear Charlie, your wonderful comments are a joy to receive! Thank you for sharing in the imagination of this poem. Your gracious presence is truly appreciated, my friend. I hope you had a merry Christmas. Warmest wishes to you and yours for a happy new year.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring December 23, 2023 at 3:47 PM Dear, sweet, talented Susan, so good to see another terrific poem from you. This is a wonderful, exquisite anacreontic couplet poem. Such a beautiful flow with perfect rhymes. Wonderful imagery,’ night stars swoon’ ‘ leafs stirs’ ‘ mountains quake’. So creative, poetically imaginative. Dear Inky is right, SO will love this! Looks like a top placement to me. May I wish you a wonderful Christmas and New year my dear friend and poetic heroine. Hugs and seasonal blessings to you xx Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:25 PM Dear Christina, my wonderfully soulful friend, I relish your gracious and inspiring spirit! Thank you for gracing my poem with your uplifting presence and encouraging words. Your golden heart and gifted poetic soul shines and I gratefully bask in your radiant glow. I hope you had a merry Christmas and I wish you and yours a happy new year. Hugs and seasonal blessings to you too, my dear friend and poetic paragon.. ~Susan

Bill Baker December 23, 2023 at 2:30 PM Great entry for the contest, Suze. Very engaging poetry. The final couplet was perfect for this poem. The imagery was delicious. A FAV for my list, my friend. Good luck in the contest! Hugs, Bill Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:09 PM Dear Bill, my poetry friend, thank you for your inspiring comments and for the high honor of your fav. Your gracious presence is uplifting and truly appreciated. So glad to know you enjoyed my poem, dear friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Brenda Chiri December 23, 2023 at 2:08 PM There’s our champagne! lol! Merry Xmas dear sissy! And as always beautifully written!:) Susan Ashley January 4, 2024 at 6:05 PM Dearest insane sissy, welcome back!! Champagne indeed! The fountains in the west and east wings are flowing and the unicorns are glowing lol! Thank you for your wonderful words. I hope you had a merry Christmas, dear sis! Warmest wishes for a happy new year filled with light, joy and poetic inspiration.. ~Susan

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