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Pillowfight

The winter snowfall

   Begins with slow, wispy flakes

     And they soon become

       A mad scene resembling

          A pillowfight of the Gods.

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Carolyn Devonshire

January 10, 2011 at 9:53 AM

What a clever analogy, Francine! Snowfall resembling "A pillowfight of the Gods." You had me smiling. Love, Carolyn

Jancarl Campi

January 10, 2011 at 8:36 AM

Hi Francine, thanks for your comment on my poem "Irish Lace Shawl" It was a day that the words just flowed. I like the idea of a snowfall seen as a pillowfight of the Gods. Great poem!! Take care, Jancarl

Eamon Duffin

January 10, 2011 at 8:00 AM

Hi Francine. I am not Scottish but have a love for Celtic/Gaelic history. Thanks for the comment. love this fine Tanka. The gentle fall of snow( the first gentle pillow hit) then the blizzard ( the all in pillow fight) Great idea, great write and greatly done. Eamon

Robert Pettit

January 10, 2011 at 7:41 AM

Francine, another fine and fanciful poem. Just one thing: "God's" needs no apostrophe because the word is only pluralized. No possessive case exists there.

Nette Onclaud

January 10, 2011 at 2:40 AM

really bubbly, francine! this is great stuff i wish i can do right now.. splendid! :) nette

Audrey Haick

January 9, 2011 at 10:48 PM

And what a pretty sight it is, Francine!! It's late night and was about to go to sleep, when I found this! A good vision to take to dreamland! Love it! Infact I'm going to keep this on my fav. list! Good night! Love, audrey

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