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Piercing Heavy Clouds

My skies darken a forboding grey When shadows overtake my day A strong breeze carries dark gloom To give the feeling of a pending doom Lightning zig zags throughout the sky Piercing heavy clouds so they can cry Date written:9/1/2019 Writing Challenge 4, August 2019 - Six Lines Sponsor, Dear Heart- Wiishkobi Ode 5th place

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Date: 9/8/2019 10:10:00 AM
Belated congratulations on your latest win, Brenda...you are becoming quite an accomplished contest writer. Very well done! With much fondness. :) john
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/8/2019 10:35:00 PM
Thank you so much John! Always making me smile!;) all my affection!;)
Date: 9/3/2019 3:42:00 PM
Brenda, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this couplet poem, well done !
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/3/2019 3:46:00 PM
Thank you so much!;)
Date: 9/2/2019 5:35:00 PM
you grabbed my attention with your gripping imagery Brenda I can almost feel the storm approaching, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/3/2019 4:31:00 AM
Thanks so much Jan!;)
Date: 9/2/2019 1:53:00 PM
A lovely poem Brenda, congrats. :)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 3:35:00 PM
Gary so sweet of you to say! Thank you!;)
Date: 9/2/2019 1:08:00 PM
i love this with every read, back to say congratulations on your win :) hugs
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 3:35:00 PM
Thank you so much Sandy!;)
Date: 9/2/2019 12:56:00 PM
- Congratulations, a lovely and touching poem Brenda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 1:09:00 PM
Thank you so very much;)
Date: 9/2/2019 10:54:00 AM
I can feel the angst of the moment, Bren, nicely penned my dear friend. Congrats on your win. Hugs, John
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 11:01:00 AM
Ahhh John thank you so very much!;)
Date: 9/2/2019 8:49:00 AM
Wow, this was amazing Brenda. You have captured the fierceness of the coming storm. probably how some are feeling in Florida right now. Best wishes in the contest
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 11:00:00 AM
Thanks so much Chris! Yea I bet Florida is hating the pending doom heading their way! I feel for them!;)
Date: 9/1/2019 10:43:00 PM
I know that pending doom in this type of storm. Great post, perfectly penned :) hugs
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 11:00:00 AM
Ahh thx Sandy that's so kind of you to say!;)
Date: 9/1/2019 10:09:00 PM
A wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck my friend!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/2/2019 10:59:00 AM
Caren my county friend thank you so very much!;)

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