Piercing Heavy Clouds

My skies darken a forboding grey 
When shadows overtake my day

A strong breeze carries dark gloom
To give the feeling of a pending doom

Lightning zig zags throughout the sky
Piercing heavy clouds so they can cry



Date written:9/1/2019
Writing Challenge 4, August 2019 - Six Lines
Sponsor, Dear Heart- Wiishkobi Ode


5th place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Fleming Avatar
September 8, 2019 at 10:10 AM
Belated congratulations on your latest win, Brenda...you are becoming quite an accomplished contest writer. Very well done! With much fondness. :) john
Chiri Avatar
September 8, 2019 at 10:35 PM
Thank you so much John! Always making me smile!;) all my affection!;)
La France Avatar
September 3, 2019 at 3:42 PM
Brenda, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this couplet poem, well done !
Chiri Avatar
September 3, 2019 at 3:46 PM
Thank you so much!;)
Allison Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 5:35 PM
you grabbed my attention with your gripping imagery Brenda I can almost feel the storm approaching, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Chiri Avatar
September 3, 2019 at 4:31 AM
Thanks so much Jan!;)
Smith Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 1:53 PM
A lovely poem Brenda, congrats. :)
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 3:35 PM
Gary so sweet of you to say! Thank you!;)
Adams Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 1:08 PM
i love this with every read, back to say congratulations on your win :) hugs
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 3:35 PM
Thank you so much Sandy!;)
Andresen Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 12:56 PM
- Congratulations, a lovely and touching poem Brenda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 1:09 PM
Thank you so very much;)
Gondolf Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 10:54 AM
I can feel the angst of the moment, Bren, nicely penned my dear friend. Congrats on your win. Hugs, John
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 11:01 AM
Ahhh John thank you so very much!;)
Green Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 8:49 AM
Wow, this was amazing Brenda. You have captured the fierceness of the coming storm. probably how some are feeling in Florida right now. Best wishes in the contest
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 11:00 AM
Thanks so much Chris! Yea I bet Florida is hating the pending doom heading their way! I feel for them!;)
Adams Avatar
September 1, 2019 at 10:43 PM
I know that pending doom in this type of storm. Great post, perfectly penned :) hugs
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 11:00 AM
Ahh thx Sandy that's so kind of you to say!;)
Krutsinger Avatar
September 1, 2019 at 10:09 PM
A wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck my friend!
Chiri Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 10:59 AM
Caren my county friend thank you so very much!;)
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