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Picture Perfect

this was his chance a picnic to seduce her in the meadow where the last girl was buried he spread out the red blanket... 4/21/13 for "the picture perfect" contest

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Juliet Ligon

Date: 10/22/2013 6:48:00 PM

Full of suspense and horror in so few lines. Great job!

Skat A

Date: 8/22/2013 9:05:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS SUSAN,, Picture awesome Perfect. LOVE ~SKAT~

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/22/2013 8:03:00 PM

nice win... always..PD

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/22/2013 3:07:00 PM

Susan, even without imagery being used very much , the "story" that this evokes leaves such an impression on the mind! For me, this is GREAT tanka. WEll, I don't know if I understand anything about tanka, but I sure love it. Congrats!!

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/22/2013 2:51:00 PM

Wonderful piece...Congrats on your win...

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/22/2013 2:48:00 PM

Reminds me of an old movie I just watched.......yikes !! Twilight Zone fodder !

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/22/2013 12:12:00 PM

This sent chills, congrats!

Robert Pettit

Date: 6/11/2013 11:53:00 PM

If Alfred Hitchcock were alive today, he would present a show based on this write. Congratulations, this is a good one.

Joseph May

Date: 6/10/2013 9:51:00 PM

congrats on your win Susan

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/10/2013 7:00:00 PM

It doesn't take many words to scare us.........terrific piece!!

Skat A

Date: 6/10/2013 2:07:00 PM

congrats in Roy's contest............. SKAT

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 6/10/2013 1:24:00 PM

Short and scary , well done Susan congratulations love xx

Roy Jerden

Date: 6/10/2013 12:56:00 PM

Congratulations on the win. I'll be posting a blog with additional comments. Cheers, Roy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2013 2:02:00 AM

soupmail. I need HELP

Kathryn Collins

Date: 4/26/2013 8:09:00 AM

Dear Susan - My favorite of the week. What a concept. Thanks for your comment and I am fine. I've got you in my favorites list, but have have been slow to pull it up. I don't see you at PFT anymore, but may not recognize you without "Black-Eyed" love you, kathy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2013 1:48:00 AM

soupmail

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/23/2013 8:35:00 AM

Good morning Susan, hope you are well?? and drinking all the chicken soup... wink! anyways, I'm only stopping by cuz I haven't heard from you in such a long long time.... I'm wondering if you have forgotten me. well i better let you go, I'm leaving work early today. LOL, and thank you for the nice and lovely hi on my Facebook this morning... I'm still waiting for this to be my day. I mean that is what you said ...:-) wink! wink! luv~PD

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/23/2013 7:37:00 AM

Yikes! Love this, Susan!...have you been watching me picnic?....haha

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2013 6:03:00 PM

soupmail

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/22/2013 4:29:00 PM

This is a scary one..Reads like a winner for the meadow contest..Thanks for stopping by..The Male Cardinal that I saw is brightly colored a deep red with the contrasting black..The Female is a very dull color more of a faded brown with just a touch of red with some black..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2013 2:46:00 PM

oh wow, FAVE!!!!!

Seosamh De Burca

Date: 4/22/2013 2:11:00 PM

Macabre, errie and wonderfully wicked. Such a simple scene yet twisted effortlessly almost Poe like.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/22/2013 10:12:00 AM

Eek! Well this gave me chills! You mix such a happy image of a picnic with the horribleness of a dead body beneath... you know how to surprise the reader! Appeals to the Stephen King fan in me.

Kash Poet

Date: 4/22/2013 2:05:00 AM

Unique approach by you Susan.Enjoyed this tanka.

Lisa Cooper

Date: 4/21/2013 6:40:00 PM

that's a scary thought... lol great thriller!