Picnic On a Rainy Day

Lush stubby grass bends and sways
A perfect place to spend our day 
Forever, it is spread, beneath our feet
Green carpet as far as the eye can see 
Encompassing silence with its prickly touch
The sky so blue, with touch of gray 
Appears to enjoy a game it plays
Gathering clouds that tease the sun
Who darts, and hides between each one
He sends a yellow ship that sails, 
Upon a sea of flowering hills

We spread our blanket under the trees
And marvel at the fickle breeze
It takes a turn, from hot to warm
It soothes the brow, then cools us down,  
We lunch with wine, French bread and cheese
Big apples, grapes, of red and green
We nap among the shady groves
Awakenend by the scent of rain

A run for cover beneath a bridge
We laugh like children, once again
And like ripples on a silent stream..
Dripping songs, and unuttered words
Sweet music is played.... new memories are heard


For Carol Brown's contest "Picnic Time"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 5/20/2011 11:27:00 PM
wow, what a romantic rainy picnic scene. Enchanting, Carrie! Congratulations, Again!!
Login to Reply
Date: 5/19/2011 9:54:00 AM
I remember this one well, Carrie. Great work! Congratulations on your win in Carol's Picnic Contest. Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 5/19/2011 9:44:00 AM
Excellent poetry on picnic, Carrie..Congratulations on your win with this beautiful poetic work..love, gautami
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 5:55:00 PM
Carrie, so great to see you on the winner's list with this great one. Congratulations on your poem's honored success. Agape, Moses
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 11:23:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your win in the contest of Carol...
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 10:23:00 AM
Nice memories here! Loved the end! Running in the rain! Congrad's Light & Love
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 9:42:00 AM
I still think this is lovely. Congratulations Carrie. Love, Joyce
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 8:04:00 AM
bring it on, carrie.. a heartwarming piece with my best of cheers for a fine win.:) huggs
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 7:36:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Carrie. Excellent piece. Nice going. xxxRalph
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 7:05:00 AM
My congratulations on the win in the contest of carol, Carrie
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 6:55:00 AM
carrie this is great congrats on your win! cory
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 5:09:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your terrific win in the picnic contest with yet another delightful write my friend.. enjoy your well deserved top ten sweet success with luv..
Login to Reply
Date: 5/18/2011 4:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning poem placing in my contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Date: 5/14/2011 7:46:00 PM
why does it always rain when we are having a picnic. this was a great piece, enjoyed it.
Login to Reply
Date: 5/14/2011 4:59:00 PM
What a delightful and memorable picnic picture you've painted here Carrie-- yes that rain could very well be the perfect ending for this fun picnic :) Love how you describe this scene so well-- you've always shone with your imagery :) Happy Sunday to you :) hugs your way Carrie :)
Login to Reply
Date: 5/14/2011 12:32:00 PM
How I love that last line, Carrie! You always amaze me with your descriptive imagery and this poem is so vividly conveyed. I felt like I was right ther with you. And at least you had a chance to eat before the rain came. Ironically, it's fixing to rain here now. The palms are swaying in the sea breeze. Great entry for Carol's contest. Winning wishes coming your way! Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 5/13/2011 8:46:00 PM
How nice! What a beautiful write, it was easy to picture this picnic time! Good luck in the contest. And thank you for your comments on my poem. Caroline.
Login to Reply
Date: 5/13/2011 8:41:00 PM
good luck in the contest,,, enjoyed,..p.d.
Login to Reply
Date: 5/13/2011 7:36:00 PM
Very beautiful visuals in this piece Carrie.. much success in Carol's contest .. rain has dampened some of our family reunion picnics but still fun was had.. good luck..
Login to Reply
Date: 5/13/2011 7:04:00 PM
Fun picnic poem Carrie. I have been wanting to enter this one but cannot get started writing. I am visiting and helping with my brother for a week and working a little from his computer. Thanks for reading and commenting. Love, Joyce
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter