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Phobia: Fear of Old Houses

Let me tell you about my fear . . . 

I keep having the same horrible, fearful dream each night-
It is snowing and I am driving my old car;
    and I have miles to go,
    when my car slides and crashes . . .
I see a house not far, dim against the sky,
reaching it, I knock on the door then I open it;
it is pitch black inside and seems to be abandoned,
     (I groan in my sleep) . . . 
    Ahead are stairs that lead up,
    at the top are dark hallways;
       with faded wallpaper and no windows but doors,
       and each door I try opening-   is locked;
          (were there not windows on the outside?)
          I am scared of the darkness and quiet,
          soon, I am lost in a maze of dark hallways.
Running down halls that go nowhere- each a dead end;
no door opens, and the hallways just go on and on . . . 
    I am lost in this house,
    and I am so tired- tired;
I fall on a dirty, threadbare rug and I sleep,   
waking in the morn' in my bed with the lights on.

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September 16, 2017

Narrative/PHOBIA:  Fear Of Old Houses
Copyright Protected, ID 940165

Written for the contest, Fear II
sponsor, Debbie Guzzi

Sixth Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Haight Avatar
September 27, 2017 at 8:54 AM
A wonderful, well-written narrative poem about your fear, Constance. You made your nightmare come to life. Congratulations on your fine placement on this short winner's list. Hugs, Sandra
Canerdy Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 11:30 PM
Constance, your WINNING poem really captures the terror of being trapped in a nightmare! Janice
Sinha-Roy Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 11:07 PM
Congratulations, BW on your placement with this really fearsome poem.
Swartz Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 8:41 PM
Wow! This is awesome! A great write deserving of the win.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 7:05 AM
I love your write! Yes, we can be fearful of those old houses. Love your commentary...i groan in my sleep, were there not windows on the outside. Bravo! gL in contest!
Sivey Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 5:48 AM
Yes, that would be a frightening dream, but it is one that I could see happening over and over again! This poem reminded me of some of my Halloween poems, the scary houses where witches live with their animated skeletons! At least you weren't being chased within the house...now that would scare me to death, being chased by something within a house with only doors (that are all locked) and no way out! I really enjoyed reading you awesome poem this morning! What a tremendous piece, Great Work!!
La France Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 6:47 AM
Russell thanks for visiting my poem and for the compliment
Allison Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 2:00 PM
very creepy imagery I'm glad it's just a dream Constance:-) hugs jan xx
La France Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 5:26 PM
Jan, thanks for the visit, I do hate old dark places
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