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There is a submarine periscope that's staring intently. Let us hope that our frail little boat's got aboard stuff that floats. All I have is this Soap-on-a-Rope.

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Date: 12/24/2011 10:20:00 PM
This is the one, right? Just do this: There's a submarine periscope/ It's staring intently. Let's hope/ that this frail little boat's/ got on board stuff that floats(that line is already perfect)/(last line is perfect too) You only had to fix two or three tiny things. Just saying "there's" instead of "there is" and making a slight adjustment on line two. It was very close to being limerick meter already, John. I think you are getting an ear for it now. The last one I saw was perfect!
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Date: 12/23/2011 2:46:00 PM
funny poem here! but not a limerick..limerick believe it or not has only 2 possible meter patterns and must be written in them to be a's a VERY strict could label your short very funny writes as Light Verse or Verse or Rhyme any of those would fit! Thanks so much for stopping by and Happy Holy Days to you!
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Date: 12/10/2011 7:50:00 AM
CAn't seem to find one I have not read already when I skim your page, but clicking on this one, I sure remembered it. It is one of my favorites for your limericks.
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Date: 10/24/2011 3:30:00 PM
interesting...did you know limericks must have exact meter? Part of the humor comes from the da da DAH da da DAH da da DAH or the da DAH da DAH da DAH..line 1 here is there's A SUBmaRINE PERiSCOPE..that's da DAH DAH da DAH DAH da DAH..just something to think about...Light & Love
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Date: 8/30/2011 7:20:00 PM
the submarine scope, side stepped the rope, torpedoed the soap and went on back to Germany
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Date: 8/28/2011 11:09:00 PM
lmao, witty and funny write Sir John...with love...old Jack
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:13:00 PM
Great verse John, the last line gave me a bit of a jolt. Love the unexpected!
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:09:00 PM
Cool fun little limerick!
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:50:00 AM
Humorous and witty write, John
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:42:00 AM
ha ha cute and clever luv.. great imaginative picture .. wow..
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:34:00 AM
Cute..Got a chuckle..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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