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Perfectly Terrible

It's a beautiful day for a hurricane,
And perfectly I feel terrible
But my Mind is twice my Bane-
My Emotions are unbearable!

I admit I've made mistakes,
Some were small but most were great
Revenge I covet- I dearly Love it:
But it's the worst of thirsts to slake!

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Robin Davis Date: 2/21/2014 8:36:00 AM Chan The Man This are some deep and powerful words that a lot of people can relate to. Making mistakes, feeling pain and sorrow, and not liking our selves for what we've done. Nice job my friend. UH OH My Willpower has a boo boo. I better go make it all better. LOL Thanks for the nice comment.. Hugs and Love Sweet Pea Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 2/21/2014 10:53:00 AM Thanks, Sweet Pea :)

Karl Marszalowicz Date: 2/2/2014 4:59:00 AM your last line is very good I encourage you to write more like that! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 2/2/2014 5:24:00 AM Thanks, Karl :)

Kelly Deschler Date: 12/22/2013 7:49:00 PM I can relate, because I have felt like this before...I really like the contrasts in every line of this poem, including the title. A very clever write, BP! I enjoyed it immensely! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/23/2013 9:24:00 AM Thanks, SP; sincerely appreciated, as always :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/20/2013 7:09:00 PM very entertaining Chan. Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/21/2013 7:56:00 AM Thanks, Richard :)

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 12/17/2013 8:31:00 PM A pure heart, JTAP Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/18/2013 11:57:00 AM Thanks, Doc :)

Poet Destroyer A Date: 12/17/2013 7:55:00 PM The ending is right Chan, ... However, I love the first and second line. How you mixed a double emotion in both lines.... I am sending soup mail. Again... PD Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/19/2013 10:05:00 AM Thanks so much, Linda; I sincerely appreciate it :)

Robin Davis Date: 12/17/2013 4:38:00 PM Chan The Man I can feel you pouring out your heart so the reader can see what's inside your soul. The emotion you are expressing is done in a creative way. Nice job my friend Hugs Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/18/2013 11:59:00 AM Thanks, Sweet Pea <3 <3 <3

Barbara Gorelick Date: 12/17/2013 3:56:00 PM The first line got to me..my mind gets scrambled too, I can relate to your poem. BG Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/17/2013 4:03:00 PM Thanks, Barbara; much appreciated :)