Lukas Ficklin Poet Rondeau

Pepcon Plant Explosion of 1988

I felt a small tremble below			
And knelt on the floor ‘cuz I know		
Something wasn’t right out of class 	
And a second much bigger blast		
Left crumbs of glass from a window	

Who is aware I can follow			 
Into the sun, I mean shadow			
A family of grades amass			
Breathtaking view				

A mushroom cloud did overflow		
And blanketed the afterglow		
From the effects of the jet gas		
That took the freedom to trespass		
Instantly my school was bulldozed		
Breathtaking view 		


5/25/2016
5 Words Contest
My 5 words are: WHO WASN'T EFFECTS
                        BREATHTAKING FAMILY

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Andrea Dietrich June 9, 2016 at 7:00 PM this was a well deserved win, Lukas. BIG congrats to you Lukas Ficklin June 9, 2016 at 8:20 PM Thanks Andrea! I was wrong with my number below it was only two fatalities... a miracle.

Timothy Hicks June 9, 2016 at 12:43 AM Such an interesting topic choice, and I love how you turned it into rondeau. Your refrain intrigued me because, although obviously a tragedy, there is a strange beauty when it comes to the sheer power of explosions ... your words invited me into the scene. Thanks for the read. Check out my blog, if you ever get the chance, and tell me about your poem :) Lukas Ficklin June 9, 2016 at 9:51 AM Thanks Timothy, I thought this contest was an excellent challenge. You left it pretty free with just enough guidelines for a muse. By the looks of the winner list you received a wide range of diversity and forms... Fun!

Andrea Dietrich June 2, 2016 at 8:31 PM wow, what a thing to have seen. you saw it in the moment, right? A very creative way to use your words Lukas Ficklin June 4, 2016 at 2:25 AM Oh yes in the moment. I was only 8 but I remember how crazy it was for weeks. the damage it created for a 5 mile radius was devastating but somehow the number who died was exceptionally low; like 3 people.. Just major injuries.

Connie Marcum Wong May 26, 2016 at 7:29 PM Lukas, your entry has an emotional edge and should do really great in the contest. Very impressive! #7. ; )

Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 9:36 AM Wow, very effective!