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More or less to the tune of The Beatles' "Penny Lane".

Tried to be as faithful as I could to the original tune,

but had to use some poetic license at the end.

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As he gently pressed his lips against her photograph His one last hope; to see her once again A tear ran down his cheek as he spoke her name… Penny Laine He sits there with the roof down on his motor car And cursed the rock on which she tripped and fell The lifeboats; they had searched the sea in pouring rain… Never seen again Penny Laine had disappeared before his eyes Lost beneath the waves ‘neath cloudy skies He held his turmoil in… but The sands have dithered too long in his hourglass Time to join his love’s eternal soul Handbrake off, toward the cliff he starts to roll One last goal Penny Laine had disappeared before his eyes He prays that she will greet him when he dies They’ll walk the skies as one… but That hated rock is one of many round about One becomes a wedge under a wheel At the cliff edge, strong hands quickly pull him out Made him squeal * He’s a barber and his doctor is a customer Who told him something purely happenstance There’s a lady in a ward in France; she has little chance… … Hello France Medics told him she would wake up only now and then And when she did she didn’t know her name It’s likely to remain the same, even though he came Such a shame Well he took her hand and placed in it the photograph And whispered, “Darling, we’ll be one again.” She sat up straight and she proclaimed, “I know my name! It’s Penny Laine.”

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Date: 7/10/2025 2:51:00 PM
Dear Terry, such tenderness in your words, Terry. Even in the depths of despair, you find a way to let love shine through. Sometimes, just when we think all is lost life surprises us with a miracle. What a testament to the power of love, memory and never giving up—even when the odds seem impossible. Summer Blessings, my Dear Terry, Daniel
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/10/2025 3:33:00 PM
Thanks, Daniel. Glad you gleaned so much from my lines. Terry
Date: 7/9/2025 8:46:00 PM
A fine poetic tale with and nice twist for an ending, Terry. It was very engaging. Bill
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/10/2025 3:31:00 PM
Thanks Bill. I’m not a fan of the Beatles but once I had the first line I just had to run with it. Nice to see you back. Terry
Date: 7/9/2025 7:28:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this along to the Penny Lane melody. Poor Penny! I'm glad it had a happy ending.
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/10/2025 3:28:00 PM
Thank you, David. I am a big fan of happy endings. If a novel or a movie starts out sad or bad and ends up sad or bad… everything in between is just filler.
Date: 7/9/2025 6:18:00 PM
This is wonderful, Terry. So enjoyable to sing along with the magical words. You are my personal 'Wizard for a Day,' Sir. Now, go for 'Eleanor Rigby' too. Can't wait. ~ Nervous Nelson
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 7/10/2025 8:04:00 PM
Problem? It was seamlessly done by a master, methinks. Thanks, Terry.
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/10/2025 3:18:00 PM
Thanks, GW. It’s strange how clumsy and over-wordy a poem can seem when spoken instead of sung. I think this song is so well known that, hopefully, it wasn’t too much of a problem.
Date: 7/9/2025 5:26:00 AM
This is quite outstanding. I sung the tune in my head. Nice entry for the contest?
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/9/2025 7:21:00 AM
I’d actually forgotten that there even was a Beatles contest. I came up with the first line and realised the tempo matched Penny Lane. There must have been something in the back of my head, because that final word ‘photograph’ would have been too weird to contemplate. Strangely, I was never really a Beatles fan.
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/9/2025 6:10:00 AM
Yeah I guess the Beatles contest expired
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/9/2025 6:01:00 AM
Thanks, Tom. Wasn’t for contest as it wasn’t ’that Extra verse’, more like a total rewrite. Terry

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