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Peek a Boo

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Oh yes, I see you, the Doc let me peek
for so long you were blurred no more than a
little gray wiggly blob Daddy would say boo

to [as if you could hear him?] saying "boo".
Maybe you did hear because out you came a
bit early! Dad was there again to peek.

Sorry about the light being so bright, a
bit scary. You started boo hooing, boo,
but you were gorgeous, still, at first peek.

So, of course your first game was peek a boo!


TRITINA

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7/22/14

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Casarah Nance

Date: 8/4/2014 4:21:00 PM

Grats on your win :) wonderful :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/4/2014 8:44:00 AM

This is so sweet, congratulations.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/4/2014 7:57:00 AM

A fabulous take Debbie n a lovely write,, congrats on huge win!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/3/2014 7:33:00 AM

Ha, peek a boo, that was fun....congratulations Debbie. A sport, first game it was. I'm thinking. Linda

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/3/2014 4:50:00 AM

nice peek a boo win for the little one, Debbie.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/2/2014 11:26:00 PM

A fine write and great win, Congrats!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/2/2014 8:42:00 PM

hey, Congratulations. I am eager to see your notes, but i just can't seem to find them by clicking on various things.Can you tell me how? WAs that you in the picture? And one more thing. Did you ever get all the stuff I sent to you about your blank verse . I sent it to the address I had from a forward that you sent to my hotmail.

Paul Callus

Date: 8/2/2014 3:21:00 PM

Lovely and pleasant take on the baby theme, Debbie! Congrats on your fine win.// paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/2/2014 2:39:00 PM

the baby coos and talks.. nice one , Debbie... big congrats..huggs

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/2/2014 12:46:00 PM

This is a charmer, Debbie, as I am sure the little one is. Congratulations.

Painted Hunter

Date: 7/29/2014 12:48:00 PM

Hmmm...where is the 'about the poem'? You know, this made me think of when my son was born. He just wouldn't come out! Part of his head would pop out and then would suck right back in...ha. He was a big boy...bout 9lbs. Ended up having to have a C-section. Peek A BOO!

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/24/2014 2:52:00 PM

well done Debbie, glad I read Andrea's reply about the last line, it allowed me to change mine...good luck in the contest

Monterey Sirak

Date: 7/24/2014 5:32:00 AM

I am not familiar with this form, but I love the poem it is so creative and just sweet. Thank you for your visit to my poem and wonderful comments.

Roy Jerden

Date: 7/23/2014 4:54:00 PM

Very clever use of the tritina, and it fit the theme perfectly! Good luck! Just saw a possible typo. Check line 9, you vs your. Cheers, Roy

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/23/2014 10:31:00 PM

thanks Roy!

Daver Austin

Date: 7/23/2014 10:43:00 AM

Congratulations, mamma. Love, daver

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/23/2014 9:41:00 AM

Peek a boo Sweet lady..An adorable Tritina..

Jeremy Street

Date: 7/22/2014 8:12:00 PM

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Jeremy Street

Date: 7/22/2014 8:10:00 PM

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2014 5:51:00 PM

I really like yours, Debs. It's different, out of the box. One thing though, I did not understand the function of "a" in your last stanza / line one. by the way, Craig and I discussed this form and he realized that I was right about it. The Tritina does not make you use your three words side by side at the end of the final phrase. I did not do mine that way, and I hope others can realize it is not necessary.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/22/2014 7:44:00 PM

good catch Andie thanks I'll fix it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2014 5:51:00 PM

We can't see about the poems anymore?