Debbie Guzzi Poet Tritina

Notes About The Poem

Peek a Boo

Oh yes, I see you, the Doc let me peek
for so long you were blurred no more than a
little gray wiggly blob Daddy would say boo

to [as if you could hear him?] saying "boo".
Maybe you did hear because out you came a
bit early! Dad was there again to peek.

Sorry about the light being so bright, a
bit scary. You started boo hooing, boo,
but you were gorgeous, still, at first peek.

So, of course your first game was peek a boo!


TRITINA

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7/22/14

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Casarah Nance August 4, 2014 at 4:21 PM Grats on your win :) wonderful :)

Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2014 at 8:44 AM This is so sweet, congratulations.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 4, 2014 at 7:57 AM A fabulous take Debbie n a lovely write,, congrats on huge win!

Poet Destroyer A August 3, 2014 at 7:33 AM Ha, peek a boo, that was fun....congratulations Debbie. A sport, first game it was. I'm thinking. Linda

Mohan Chutani August 3, 2014 at 4:50 AM nice peek a boo win for the little one, Debbie.

Robert Lindley August 2, 2014 at 11:26 PM A fine write and great win, Congrats!

Andrea Dietrich August 2, 2014 at 8:42 PM hey, Congratulations. I am eager to see your notes, but i just can't seem to find them by clicking on various things.Can you tell me how? WAs that you in the picture? And one more thing. Did you ever get all the stuff I sent to you about your blank verse . I sent it to the address I had from a forward that you sent to my hotmail.

Paul Callus August 2, 2014 at 3:21 PM Lovely and pleasant take on the baby theme, Debbie! Congrats on your fine win.// paul

Nette Onclaud August 2, 2014 at 2:39 PM the baby coos and talks.. nice one , Debbie... big congrats..huggs

Faye Gibson August 2, 2014 at 12:46 PM This is a charmer, Debbie, as I am sure the little one is. Congratulations.

Painted Hunter July 29, 2014 at 12:48 PM Hmmm...where is the 'about the poem'? You know, this made me think of when my son was born. He just wouldn't come out! Part of his head would pop out and then would suck right back in...ha. He was a big boy...bout 9lbs. Ended up having to have a C-section. Peek A BOO!

Frederic Parker July 24, 2014 at 2:52 PM well done Debbie, glad I read Andrea's reply about the last line, it allowed me to change mine...good luck in the contest

Monterey Sirak July 24, 2014 at 5:32 AM I am not familiar with this form, but I love the poem it is so creative and just sweet. Thank you for your visit to my poem and wonderful comments.

Roy Jerden July 23, 2014 at 4:54 PM Very clever use of the tritina, and it fit the theme perfectly! Good luck! Just saw a possible typo. Check line 9, you vs your. Cheers, Roy Debbie Guzzi July 23, 2014 at 10:31 PM thanks Roy!

Daver Austin July 23, 2014 at 10:43 AM Congratulations, mamma. Love, daver

Charmaine Chircop July 23, 2014 at 9:41 AM Peek a boo Sweet lady..An adorable Tritina..

Jeremy Street July 22, 2014 at 8:12 PM |*:*\(*{{....

Jeremy Street July 22, 2014 at 8:10 PM *.*

Andrea Dietrich July 22, 2014 at 5:51 PM I really like yours, Debs. It's different, out of the box. One thing though, I did not understand the function of "a" in your last stanza / line one. by the way, Craig and I discussed this form and he realized that I was right about it. The Tritina does not make you use your three words side by side at the end of the final phrase. I did not do mine that way, and I hope others can realize it is not necessary. Debbie Guzzi July 22, 2014 at 7:44 PM good catch Andie thanks I'll fix it!

Andrea Dietrich July 22, 2014 at 5:51 PM We can't see about the poems anymore?

Jan Allison July 22, 2014 at 5:38 PM charming write Debbie - there is no about this poem link as far as i can see it seems to have disappeared! Hugs Jan x