Jan Allison Poet Personification

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Peacock

I am the most regal bird you’ll ever see in the land
With my spectacular plumage, I’m pompous and grand

My mate is quite dowdy as all her feathers are brown
But we have royal connections as we both wear a crown!

Did you know that my tail feathers are known as a train
Of course I need no encouragement to show it off again!

My train’s got over fifty ocelli which means simple eyes
and when I fly high into the sky folk look up in surprise

I’m one of the largest flying birds ever known to man
With my enormous tail I’ve got a five foot wingspan

Yes, I’m a proud peacock and it’s no wonder folk stare
when I strut round palace gardens with my tail in the air

I ignore all other birds,  they think I’m nasty and snide -
so an apt noun for us peacocks is an ostentation or pride!

I am a Bird - Personification Poetry Contest

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07/24/20

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Andrea Dietrich August 4, 2020 at 3:37 PM I like that you and I wrote kind of similarly on our birds. So glad this scored a high placement. Congrats , my friend. Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 3:55 PM thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrew Crisci August 4, 2020 at 11:59 AM Congratulations on your first place, Jan. Your poem is beautuflully and craftly written in a style that's so uniquely yours. I hope you are staying safe and taking care of yourself. The pandemic is spiking in the USA. Young crowds are irresponsible. No asks and no social distancing. This is very scary. I have enjoyed reading your poem about the stunning peacock. Birds are beautful and inspiring. Have a wonderful day with your family. Be well, stay safe and smile. Your Poetry Soup friend, Andrew. Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:41 PM thanks Andrew:-) here on our little Island we are covid free over 74 days now, makes me so glad i live here and not in the uK or further afield. stay safe and keep well:-)hugs Jan x Andrew Crisci August 4, 2020 at 12:00 PM typo: no masks

V. Deepa August 3, 2020 at 2:39 AM Wonderful write Jan mam:-) Peacock is my favourite bird.It's a national bird of our country India.:-) You've described very beautifully.Congrats on your top win:-)Keep inspiring.Much love:-) Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:43 PM thanks V Deepa:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper August 2, 2020 at 9:24 AM Jan, great descriptive poem and personification. they are a beautiful bird and do walk around like they rule their surroundings. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:43 PM thanks Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Patri Venkata Ramana August 2, 2020 at 6:26 AM A beautiful poem. Congrats on your win ! Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:43 PM thanks Patri:-) hugs jan xx

Aditi Mishra August 2, 2020 at 3:58 AM Such a beautiful personfication of a peacock Jan! Loved the vibrant colours and moods. It is really a rare opportunity to see a peacock dancing with unfurled wings. Congratulations on your win! :) Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:44 PM thanks Aditi:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt August 1, 2020 at 10:43 PM Congratulations for your excellent peacock poem, dear Jan! Worthy of #1 Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:44 PM thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier August 1, 2020 at 8:47 PM A pleasure to read ~ congrats on your top win. I did not know peacocks were able to fly!! Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:45 PM thanks Line, yes the pesky birds fly into our friend's garden and cause havoc:-( hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta August 1, 2020 at 8:46 PM Gorgeous. Majestic. I love Peacock. Big Congrats to win Top Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:45 PM thanks Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Schneiter August 1, 2020 at 7:55 PM Jan, this poem is as magnificent as the peacock's plumage. That is, of course, no surprise--premium-quality excellence is your hallmark in poem after poem after poem. Your talent is astonishing. Hugs, Paul Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:46 PM aww you are such a sweetheart thanks for dropping by Paul:-) hugs Jan x

Janice Canerdy August 1, 2020 at 2:38 PM Jan, this is a fabulous, vividly descriptive, delightful, WINNING poem! Janice Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:47 PM thanks Janice:-) hugs jan xx

Robert L. Hinshaw August 1, 2020 at 1:10 PM Congrats for your well-deserved win! I'm honored to share lst place with you - Bob Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:47 PM thanks Bob:-) hugs jan xx

Tania Kitchin August 1, 2020 at 12:35 PM Jan, congratulations on your first place win with your wonderful personification poem, peacocks do seem pompous! :) hugs Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:48 PM thanks Tania:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt July 30, 2020 at 11:28 AM Love the treatment of the beautiful peacock and his ostentatious attitude towards others. Makes a good metaphor for some humans, methinks. Well done, this should be a winner. Hugs ~ John Jan Allison August 4, 2020 at 12:48 PM Yeah Ive met a few peacocks on here:-( hugs jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi July 28, 2020 at 3:14 PM I did not know they could fly... I have learned so much from this inspiring piece. Good work. Jan Allison July 28, 2020 at 3:22 PM oh yes they can fly as they come into our friend's garden and wreak havoc:-( hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin July 27, 2020 at 5:26 AM Absolutely amazing Jan!! great job! Jan Allison July 27, 2020 at 2:00 PM Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf July 26, 2020 at 4:52 PM Lovely written -- and so informative too, in such a palatable way!! G.L. in the contest, Jan! :) gw Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 4:58 PM thanks so much GW:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger July 26, 2020 at 1:02 PM You are a fancy schmancy, cocky bird; I am assuming you are a male peacock. Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 1:12 PM Yes a peacock is male a peahen is female:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire July 26, 2020 at 11:06 AM You certainly chose a magnificent bird, Jan, and described the peacock perfectly. There's a bird park in S. Florida where you can see many of them, but I never did see one flying. Imagine that! An excellent entry for the contest, Hon. Wishing you success. Hugs, Carolyn Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 12:58 PM You wouldn't expect such a huge bird to take to the air - my friend's wish they couldn't fly as they cause havoc in their garden - their neighbour had 5 adults and of course over the years they have bred - last brood was 5 chicks:-( hugs jan xx

Jack Horne July 26, 2020 at 11:03 AM love this fun piece - makes me think of a cartoon I once saw, where there's a peacock strutting before a peahen & she says, 'Cut the crap & show me your dick.' LOL Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 12:55 PM OMG that's hilarious!:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2020 at 6:07 PM This should be the official bird of the White House. This is a fun one Jan. Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 12:55 PM ha ha ha the orange ommpah loompah certainly struts like a peacock lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta July 25, 2020 at 3:17 PM Well thought and done, Jan! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison July 26, 2020 at 12:54 PM Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen July 25, 2020 at 1:25 PM - So beautifully described, Jan - A greeting to the Royal Family Allison :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison July 25, 2020 at 2:06 PM Lol I am far from royal unless you count my queen of poop crown lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel July 24, 2020 at 10:10 PM Beautifully said, Jan, I wrote on White Peacock:) Jan Allison July 25, 2020 at 2:05 PM I will go and read it now Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie July 24, 2020 at 5:18 PM G'day Jan ... a very good personification Jan. One glitch with male peacocks is if two live at each end of town, their calling to each other drives people mad - thank you Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison July 25, 2020 at 2:01 PM They are the bane of our friends lives:-( Hugs Jan xx

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