Dan Helppi Poet Iambic Pentameter

Peace

Disgorge the land, unload the ship, and take
the old and new to keep. For down they went
the rich and poor, all good all bad, all dead.
We pound our drum we beat our chest, the lost
are done so eat the corn. My heart, your heart
is not to care, the Gods are one and that 
is good, so go and yell the news, we won
the war is done and peace begun. It might 
be peace to us; to them no peace is won
no cake is cut no war is done, oh well!

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Dave Timperley January 16, 2015 at 3:50 PM Peace is won but at what cost? I love the apathetic ''Oh well'' at the end. No winners in war, just survivors. God Bless. D.

Richard Lamoureux November 28, 2014 at 2:41 PM There is something brilliant about having your first poem be about peace. If you build the rest upon the foundation of peace your words will rise high upon the landscape of our minds. Dan Helppi November 29, 2014 at 7:50 AM Your words are very kind Richard, thank you.

Dr.Ram Mehta November 8, 2014 at 5:56 AM Interesting write, congrats on the win Dan Helppi November 8, 2014 at 10:38 AM Thank you Dr. Ram

Rob Carmack November 7, 2014 at 3:56 AM Dan - congrats to you. Dan Helppi November 7, 2014 at 8:15 AM Thank you.

Brenda Meier-Hans November 6, 2014 at 9:27 PM Congratulations on your win Dan. You did a fantastic job on this poem, I could really feel the rhythm. Dan Helppi November 7, 2014 at 8:14 AM Thank you Brenda

Millicent Mashatola November 5, 2014 at 1:44 AM Brilliant write....I like it, :-) hugs milly Dan Helppi November 5, 2014 at 9:49 AM Thank you, kind Milly.

Bl Devnath October 31, 2014 at 9:14 AM It's a nice heartfelt message, my lovely poet friend. Thanks and loved always,bl Dan Helppi October 31, 2014 at 9:34 PM You are welcome, bl

Paul Schneiter October 30, 2014 at 10:21 PM Dan, You do a masterful job of using irony in this poem. It's an authentic "think" piece. Congratulations on an excellent composition. Dan Helppi October 30, 2014 at 11:51 PM Thanks Paul.

Suzanne C. Goudreau October 30, 2014 at 5:35 PM Beautifully penned. Inspiring message is very much heartfelt as some have peace and others will never know it. A very brilliant write. Dan Helppi October 30, 2014 at 8:43 PM Thank you Suzanne. I appreciate your kindness.

Casarah Nance October 29, 2014 at 9:46 PM I like! it took me a long time to comprehend meter poetry, yours didn't seem forced at all, smooth lines and subject flow. Good job,. Welcome to the soup, (sorry I'm a slow greeter this week has been rough) but I have seen you around and glad to have the time to read you. You are going to make a great addition to this soup bowl :) Dan Helppi October 30, 2014 at 5:10 PM Thanks to all you say so kindly, I feel so welcomed here at poetry soup. Take care Casarah.

Verlena S. Walker October 27, 2014 at 1:09 PM Brilliant write Dan and enjoyed as well. Verlena Dan Helppi October 27, 2014 at 3:35 PM I'm glad you enjoyed!

Cona Adams October 27, 2014 at 8:28 AM A agree with Maurice, Dan. This is a great read, and a true picture of the deplorable effects of war. Thanks for sharing. Dan Helppi October 27, 2014 at 3:34 PM Thank you Cona.

Maurice Yvonne October 26, 2014 at 8:53 PM From your mouth to God's ear. I have never written in Iambic (any)meter so I am always impressed by people who can write meter. Besides the form I am all in on the message, two thumbs up. I loved it as a read. All in all this is an impressive write. I am going to fav it to have for my collection. I am also going to add you to my fav poets list. All the best to you. Dan Helppi October 26, 2014 at 9:20 PM Maurice, I appreciate all you say, I love kind people, and you are very kind.

Liam Mcdaid October 25, 2014 at 1:44 PM love how you drew this one dan powerful pen Dan Helppi October 25, 2014 at 2:01 PM Thank you for the encouraging words Liam.

Dave Timperley October 25, 2014 at 9:19 AM A cracking start with your incoming poem. Welcome to the Soup! God Bless. D. Dan Helppi October 25, 2014 at 9:34 AM Thank you Dave, and yes God indeed continues to bless me.

Richard Lamoureux October 25, 2014 at 8:53 AM This is a skillful and entertaining piece. Welcome to the soup. Dan Helppi October 25, 2014 at 9:33 AM Thank you Richard!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 20, 2014 at 2:32 AM powerful poem!!! love the last line.. :)!!! thank you so much for liking my poem.. well that poem rooted from my innermost yearning of father's love... and until now as I come to read that poem stilk same feeling when I made it it aroused.. welcome to poetrysoup!!!:) i had been here more than 2years and i enjoyed it here i hope you will too as you roam around . :) Dan Helppi October 20, 2014 at 7:35 AM Thank you. This site is amazing! There is such a variety of fresh poems, yummy!

Anne-Lise Andresen October 19, 2014 at 1:07 PM - Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Dan - I choose your first very well written poem - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Dan Helppi October 19, 2014 at 1:35 PM Thank you, I will.

Pandita Sietesantos October 18, 2014 at 8:50 PM Hi Dan, I extend a warm welcome to PoetrySoup! Great way to get it going with an excellent piece! Best wishes. Pandita Dan Helppi October 18, 2014 at 9:13 PM Thank you for the kind words, thank you.