Peace

Disgorge the land, unload the ship, and take the old and new to keep. For down they went the rich and poor, all good all bad, all dead. We pound our drum we beat our chest, the lost are done so eat the corn. My heart, your heart is not to care, the Gods are one and that is good, so go and yell the news, we won the war is done and peace begun. It might be peace to us; to them no peace is won no cake is cut no war is done, oh well!

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Dave Timperley

Date: 1/16/2015 3:50:00 PM

Peace is won but at what cost? I love the apathetic ''Oh well'' at the end. No winners in war, just survivors. God Bless. D.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/28/2014 2:41:00 PM

There is something brilliant about having your first poem be about peace. If you build the rest upon the foundation of peace your words will rise high upon the landscape of our minds.

Dan Helppi
Date: 11/29/2014 7:50:00 AM

Your words are very kind Richard, thank you.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/8/2014 5:56:00 AM

Interesting write, congrats on the win

Dan Helppi
Date: 11/8/2014 10:38:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Ram

Rob Carmack

Date: 11/7/2014 3:56:00 AM

Dan - congrats to you.

Dan Helppi
Date: 11/7/2014 8:15:00 AM

Thank you.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/6/2014 9:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Dan. You did a fantastic job on this poem, I could really feel the rhythm.

Dan Helppi
Date: 11/7/2014 8:14:00 AM

Thank you Brenda

Millicent Mashatola

Date: 11/5/2014 1:44:00 AM

Brilliant write....I like it, :-) hugs milly

Dan Helppi
Date: 11/5/2014 9:49:00 AM

Thank you, kind Milly.

Bl Devnath

Date: 10/31/2014 9:14:00 AM

It's a nice heartfelt message, my lovely poet friend. Thanks and loved always,bl

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/31/2014 9:34:00 PM

You are welcome, bl

Paul Schneiter

Date: 10/30/2014 10:21:00 PM

Dan, You do a masterful job of using irony in this poem. It's an authentic "think" piece. Congratulations on an excellent composition.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/30/2014 11:51:00 PM

Thanks Paul.

Suzanne C. Goudreau

Date: 10/30/2014 5:35:00 PM

Beautifully penned. Inspiring message is very much heartfelt as some have peace and others will never know it. A very brilliant write.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/30/2014 8:43:00 PM

Thank you Suzanne. I appreciate your kindness.

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/29/2014 9:46:00 PM

I like! it took me a long time to comprehend meter poetry, yours didn't seem forced at all, smooth lines and subject flow. Good job,. Welcome to the soup, (sorry I'm a slow greeter this week has been rough) but I have seen you around and glad to have the time to read you. You are going to make a great addition to this soup bowl :)

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/30/2014 5:10:00 PM

Thanks to all you say so kindly, I feel so welcomed here at poetry soup. Take care Casarah.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 10/27/2014 1:09:00 PM

Brilliant write Dan and enjoyed as well. Verlena

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/27/2014 3:35:00 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed!

Cona Adams

Date: 10/27/2014 8:28:00 AM

A agree with Maurice, Dan. This is a great read, and a true picture of the deplorable effects of war. Thanks for sharing.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/27/2014 3:34:00 PM

Thank you Cona.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/26/2014 8:53:00 PM

From your mouth to God's ear. I have never written in Iambic (any)meter so I am always impressed by people who can write meter. Besides the form I am all in on the message, two thumbs up. I loved it as a read. All in all this is an impressive write. I am going to fav it to have for my collection. I am also going to add you to my fav poets list. All the best to you.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/26/2014 9:20:00 PM

Maurice, I appreciate all you say, I love kind people, and you are very kind.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/25/2014 1:44:00 PM

love how you drew this one dan powerful pen

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/25/2014 2:01:00 PM

Thank you for the encouraging words Liam.

Dave Timperley

Date: 10/25/2014 9:19:00 AM

A cracking start with your incoming poem. Welcome to the Soup! God Bless. D.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/25/2014 9:34:00 AM

Thank you Dave, and yes God indeed continues to bless me.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/25/2014 8:53:00 AM

This is a skillful and entertaining piece. Welcome to the soup.

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/25/2014 9:33:00 AM

Thank you Richard!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/20/2014 2:32:00 AM

powerful poem!!! love the last line.. :)!!! thank you so much for liking my poem.. well that poem rooted from my innermost yearning of father's love... and until now as I come to read that poem stilk same feeling when I made it it aroused.. welcome to poetrysoup!!!:) i had been here more than 2years and i enjoyed it here i hope you will too as you roam around . :)

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/20/2014 7:35:00 AM

Thank you. This site is amazing! There is such a variety of fresh poems, yummy!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/19/2014 1:07:00 PM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Dan - I choose your first very well written poem - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/19/2014 1:35:00 PM

Thank you, I will.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/18/2014 8:50:00 PM

Hi Dan, I extend a warm welcome to PoetrySoup! Great way to get it going with an excellent piece! Best wishes. Pandita

Dan Helppi
Date: 10/18/2014 9:13:00 PM

Thank you for the kind words, thank you.