Richard Lamoureux Poet Quintain (English)

Passionate Storm

The rain cascaded, those tiny tear drops.
Leaving a small path, on her smooth plump lips.
It was like nature pulled out all the stops.
I drank from her bounty, with thirsty sips.
Those tiny teardrops, on her smooth plump lips!

Drifting on passion, rising with the swell.
Paradise fullfilled, love's secret revealed.
As a gentleman, I can never tell.
So those details, in my heart have been sealed.
I can never tell, love's secret revealed.

We parted ways, after the morning storm.
Our tsunami, was a wonderful kind
She walked away, I admired her form.
I'll remember her, she'll stay on my mind.
After the morning storm, she'll stay on my mind!


Second attempt for Craig Cornish's contest.

Form: Manassian Quintain

I hope I got it right this time Craig and Eileen!

My first attempt was "Crashing on The Shore", thanks
Seren for letting me know I messed up the form.;0)

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Eileen Manassian July 7, 2024 at 8:17 AM How did I even wind up here?? I had a form? I forgot all about it. Thanks for using it and for winning. Maybe I should resurrect this. BTW... these kinds of storms are the best kind.

Skat A February 18, 2015 at 10:32 PM Richard, Congratulations in Craig's contest. SKAT

David Mohn February 18, 2015 at 7:40 PM Congrats Richard....beautifully written Richard Lamoureux February 18, 2015 at 8:17 PM Thanks David.

Janet Eaton February 18, 2015 at 6:39 AM Congratulations on your win. Janet Richard Lamoureux February 18, 2015 at 7:25 AM Thanks Janet.

Joseph May February 17, 2015 at 9:17 PM Congrats on your win .. Richard Lamoureux February 18, 2015 at 7:25 AM Thanks Joseph.

Jan Allison February 17, 2015 at 5:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats Richard:-) Hugs Jan xx Richard Lamoureux February 18, 2015 at 7:27 AM Thanks Jan.

Etienne Lariviere January 26, 2015 at 5:28 PM oh la la, how I love a passionate Storm!! :) This is a a very passionate poem mon ami Richard Lamoureux February 18, 2015 at 8:18 PM Merci!

Debbie Guzzi January 24, 2015 at 7:34 PM Very nice content, I haven't tried it? :( Light & Love

James Peranteau January 21, 2015 at 1:36 PM Your pen squeezes your words out like lumps on your slip ! I just have to read another ! Much love, james Richard Lamoureux January 21, 2015 at 4:21 PM A most interesting comment.

Red Fiery January 21, 2015 at 12:27 AM I know what brings me here! Marvellous work Richard..I know it's quite late but I still wish to say happy new year! Richard Lamoureux January 21, 2015 at 7:31 AM What a pleasant surprise to start my day! How have you been?

Monterey Sirak January 20, 2015 at 2:00 PM I love this one! A gentleman always keeps a lady's secrets. I never thought of a tsunami as 'wonderful' but you always present things in a new light. One of the things I love about your poetry. Richard Lamoureux January 21, 2015 at 7:32 AM What a nice thing to say Monterey, thanks. ;0)

Robert Lindley January 20, 2015 at 12:45 AM A wonderful write my friend. Had to go check my entry titled Lake, Water And Sun to make sure I did it right the first time! Luckily I did.. This entry is a fascinating poem my friend. Best of luck in Craig's contest amigo! A7 I give this jewel.. Robert Lindley January 20, 2015 at 8:02 AM Thanks Richard. Correction made to mine, I haven't a clue how I missed that.. Richard Lamoureux January 20, 2015 at 7:13 AM Thanks Robert, I will check out yours.

Arthur Vaso January 17, 2015 at 9:39 PM Ummm call me crazy, but you just told us!!! LOL Alas I must say only a gentleman could write such romantic and passionate prose! Loved this!

Charmaine Chircop January 17, 2015 at 7:19 PM This is even more beautiful..So romantic it is!To my fvs..,Charma

Maurice Yvonne January 17, 2015 at 7:04 PM Excellent, Richard I hope this scores big for you personally I love it.

Connie Marcum Wong January 17, 2015 at 6:56 PM I am not that familiar with this form and I know they take time. It sounds wonderful to me Richard! Best of luck in the contest.

Paul Callus January 17, 2015 at 9:00 AM This love tsunami will do well, Richard. I love it. Nature pulled out all the stops...so did you! #7+++ excellent. // paul Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 6:39 PM You are kind Paul, thanks for the 7+++

Eileen Manassian January 16, 2015 at 11:37 PM Back to read this beauty, Richard. Sorry I didn't visit you yesterday....it was a crazy day. Hubby and daughter came back from a trip and work was a bit intense. Just dropping this note before I had out to church. Today I'm giving a talk. "Longing with Eternal Value". It's an emotional presentation. Hope all goes well. Hugs Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 8:35 AM I had a busy one as well. I am sure your talk will go very well Eileen, you are a very good speaker. Hugs to you as well.

Verlena S. Walker January 16, 2015 at 9:04 PM Lovely Rick... Verlena Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 8:36 AM Thanks Verlena.

Shadow Hamilton January 16, 2015 at 6:31 PM it reads well Rick passionate write gl in contest hugs Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 8:37 AM Thanks for the luck shadow. Hugs back to you.

Nette Onclaud January 16, 2015 at 10:07 AM I like how you wove the tsunami of love into this wonderful piece, rich... uniquely done!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 8:41 AM Huggs and thanks Nette.

Carrie Richards January 16, 2015 at 10:07 AM This form was such a challenge to get right....but this creation made it look smooth as silk !! Lovely !! Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2015 at 8:40 AM Ahhhhhh thanks Carrie, what a sweet thing to say.

David Meade January 16, 2015 at 8:01 AM Nicely done Richard, this contest was way over my ability so I am glad you not only tried it but nailed it! It's hard to be a gentleman with a love this intense! 7 Richard Lamoureux January 16, 2015 at 8:28 AM I doubt it would be beyond your ability, you are a talented guy. Thanks for the compliment on my poem.

Demetrios Trifiatis January 16, 2015 at 4:29 AM If storms have such effects then who wouldn't love storms? Stormy poetry that make the heart palpitate so vividly! Great poem , dear Richard! Richard Lamoureux January 16, 2015 at 8:30 AM Thanks Demetrios. I have enjoyed a few stormy relationships but prefer a more serene existance.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 16, 2015 at 4:27 AM vivid imagery i love the first stanza best.. :) olivre eloisa Richard Lamoureux January 16, 2015 at 8:32 AM Thanks Olive.

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