Jan Allison Poet Dodoitsu

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Part 2 Fully Booked

Fate intervened on this day
I overslept... missed my train.
Find out about the rail crash -
Not a soul survived.


7,7,7,5 checked with how many syllables

Book Chosen Eleven Minutes by Paolo Coehlo

Contest Part 2 Fully booked
Sponsor Nette Onclaud
06~23~16

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Joanna Daniel June 27, 2016 at 6:28 AM Congratulations on your win, Jan:) Jan Allison June 28, 2016 at 3:06 PM Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Carol Eastman June 26, 2016 at 12:26 PM So very sad but great write! Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 4:45 PM Thanks Carol thankfully its a fiction write for me:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud June 26, 2016 at 10:13 AM what a lucky omen, jan... great one from you... huge kudos and thanks for being part of my contest.. huggs Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 11:09 AM Thanks Nette:-) hugs jan x

Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2016 at 9:34 AM Congrats, dear friend. The message behind this was awesome. Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 9:40 AM Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema June 26, 2016 at 8:23 AM OMG! Thanks to the Lord! Congrats Jan! Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 9:40 AM Pure fiction write for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior June 26, 2016 at 7:44 AM Congrats! Jan on the win...great job...^WW^ Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 9:40 AM Thanks so much ^WW^ hugs jan xx

Karam Misra June 25, 2016 at 8:55 PM Congrats on your win, Jan! ~karam~ Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 6:46 AM Thanks Karam:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta June 25, 2016 at 7:15 PM Congrats JAN to win. Hugs Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 6:45 AM Thanks Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight June 25, 2016 at 2:17 PM Back to congratulate you on your win, Jan. I knew it would place high! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison June 25, 2016 at 2:55 PM Thanks Sandra I am delighted Nette liked it - I did amend it slightly from the original - maybe that did the trick:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks June 24, 2016 at 12:46 PM Never read the book, but I have heard of an author. It's days like these, one would quickly contemplate destiny ... A poignant moment of reflection and thankfulness. P.S. Is the book good? Jan Allison June 24, 2016 at 12:58 PM No idea Timothy - just used the book title as inspiration for the contest I have no idea what the actual book is about :-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 24, 2016 at 9:01 AM that would be an incredible feeling to know one had missed such an event, Jan!! Jan Allison June 24, 2016 at 12:16 PM I can't begin to imagine the emotions you would go through Andrea:-( hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta June 24, 2016 at 6:10 AM Superb ... A great write ... Jan Allison June 24, 2016 at 6:13 AM Thanks so much Probir:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam June 24, 2016 at 2:09 AM Excellent. A great Dodoitsu. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it. Jan Allison June 24, 2016 at 6:13 AM Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Wendy Rycroft June 24, 2016 at 1:41 AM Very impacting wow great x Jan Allison June 24, 2016 at 6:12 AM I changed it slightly from the original poem - i hope Nette likes It:-) hugs Jan xx

Jajosh Ongado June 23, 2016 at 12:43 PM Being late was a lucky charm for you! Marvelous poem! Perhaps, what you wanted to say was Oh " brother" and " heard"-- just thinking aloud. 7 it is! Jan Allison June 23, 2016 at 1:31 PM Thankfully just a fiction write Jajosh but you do hear of these things happening - I was writing it from the point of me being on the train - thanks for the thought though:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight June 23, 2016 at 12:17 PM A great Dodoitsu, Jan, that has a powerful impact. Good luck with the contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison June 23, 2016 at 1:29 PM Thanks Sandra - I do hope Nette likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith June 23, 2016 at 11:54 AM Ive heard many stories like this. Missed trains, planes, stuck in traffic, unexplained reasons....Good luck Jan Jan Allison June 23, 2016 at 11:58 AM Thanks Tim, thought I better pen a poem the contest is nearly full!:-) hugs Jan xx