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Part 2 Fully Booked

Fate intervened on this day
I overslept... missed my train.
Find out about the rail crash -
Not a soul survived.


7,7,7,5 checked with how many syllables

Book Chosen Eleven Minutes by Paolo Coehlo

Contest Part 2 Fully booked
Sponsor Nette Onclaud
06~23~16

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2016

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Joanna Daniel Date: 6/27/2016 6:28:00 AM Congratulations on your win, Jan:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/28/2016 3:06:00 PM Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Carol Eastman Date: 6/26/2016 12:26:00 PM So very sad but great write! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 4:45:00 PM Thanks Carol thankfully its a fiction write for me:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 6/26/2016 10:13:00 AM what a lucky omen, jan... great one from you... huge kudos and thanks for being part of my contest.. huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 11:09:00 AM Thanks Nette:-) hugs jan x

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/26/2016 9:34:00 AM Congrats, dear friend. The message behind this was awesome. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 9:40:00 AM Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema Date: 6/26/2016 8:23:00 AM OMG! Thanks to the Lord! Congrats Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 9:40:00 AM Pure fiction write for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior Date: 6/26/2016 7:44:00 AM Congrats! Jan on the win...great job...^WW^ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 9:40:00 AM Thanks so much ^WW^ hugs jan xx

Karam Misra Date: 6/25/2016 8:55:00 PM Congrats on your win, Jan! ~karam~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 6:46:00 AM Thanks Karam:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta Date: 6/25/2016 7:15:00 PM Congrats JAN to win. Hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2016 6:45:00 AM Thanks Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 6/25/2016 2:17:00 PM Back to congratulate you on your win, Jan. I knew it would place high! Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/25/2016 2:55:00 PM Thanks Sandra I am delighted Nette liked it - I did amend it slightly from the original - maybe that did the trick:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks Date: 6/24/2016 12:46:00 PM Never read the book, but I have heard of an author. It's days like these, one would quickly contemplate destiny ... A poignant moment of reflection and thankfulness. P.S. Is the book good? Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/24/2016 12:58:00 PM No idea Timothy - just used the book title as inspiration for the contest I have no idea what the actual book is about :-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/24/2016 9:01:00 AM that would be an incredible feeling to know one had missed such an event, Jan!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/24/2016 12:16:00 PM I can't begin to imagine the emotions you would go through Andrea:-( hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta Date: 6/24/2016 6:10:00 AM Superb ... A great write ... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/24/2016 6:13:00 AM Thanks so much Probir:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 6/24/2016 2:09:00 AM Excellent. A great Dodoitsu. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/24/2016 6:13:00 AM Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Wendy Rycroft Date: 6/24/2016 1:41:00 AM Very impacting wow great x Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/24/2016 6:12:00 AM I changed it slightly from the original poem - i hope Nette likes It:-) hugs Jan xx

Jajosh Ongado Date: 6/23/2016 12:43:00 PM Being late was a lucky charm for you! Marvelous poem! Perhaps, what you wanted to say was Oh " brother" and " heard"-- just thinking aloud. 7 it is! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/23/2016 1:31:00 PM Thankfully just a fiction write Jajosh but you do hear of these things happening - I was writing it from the point of me being on the train - thanks for the thought though:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 6/23/2016 12:17:00 PM A great Dodoitsu, Jan, that has a powerful impact. Good luck with the contest. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/23/2016 1:29:00 PM Thanks Sandra - I do hope Nette likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 6/23/2016 11:54:00 AM Ive heard many stories like this. Missed trains, planes, stuck in traffic, unexplained reasons....Good luck Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/23/2016 11:58:00 AM Thanks Tim, thought I better pen a poem the contest is nearly full!:-) hugs Jan xx