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Original title - PARADISE LOST amended for the contest

Written for Poem in Paradise Contest
Sponsored by Isaiah Zerbst
~ Awarded 4th Place in Contest~

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Many many years have passed by
She sits alone and reminisces
Reading the diary from when they first met
Recalling the memories from so long ago

She remembers back to her wedding day
Orange blossoms intertwined in her hair
Sweet scented gardenias in her bouquet
Her handsome groom standing at the alter

How she would love to go back
To those halcyon days gone by
When her husband was still alive
Not just a memory in her mind's eye

He fought for king and country
To give others a better life
Now he resides in paradise
And in the heart of his lonely wife

Submitted to J Contest
Sponsored by Constance La France


07~19~14

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Constance La France

Date: 9/15/2021 6:12:00 AM

Jan, excellent and congratulations on your win in my "I" contest with this beautiful poem, well done and I like the image too ~ love and serenity _Constance

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/13/2021 9:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a lovely story/write. I can smell your garden, orange blossoms and gardenias. Two pretty flowers just like this write. Have a blessed day....................

Joseph May

Date: 9/13/2021 5:13:00 AM

A wonderful write with a melancholy ending, Congrats on your win Jan

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/13/2021 3:31:00 AM

Love the imagery: Orange blossoms intertwined in her hair/ Sweet scented gardenias in her bouquet/ I remember my mom putting baby’s breath in mine. Congratulations, Jan!

JCB Brul

Date: 9/12/2021 8:27:00 PM

Lovely! I love the halcyon days…nostalgia fills the air as I read this excellent poem.Congratulations Jan..

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 9/12/2021 8:08:00 PM

Poignant. Yet beyond the dark abyss, God’s healing light holds promise. Congrats on your win, Jan!

Natasha L Scragg

Date: 9/12/2021 12:13:00 PM

Aw this is beautiful Jan. Huge Congrats on your placement in the competition xx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/12/2021 9:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Jan. Your word pictures reached into my heart like a wistful old song. They painted a very real picture. Warm winter wishes to along with hugs! ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2021 9:52:00 AM

I used to love writing for Isaiah's contests he encouraged me to go out of my comfort zone and I worked hard on imagery... I miss him, his wisdom and his encouragement and his beautiful poetry:-( hugs Jan xx

Sandra Adams

Date: 7/6/2019 1:09:00 PM

Such a poignant poem draws the reader into its depths! Congrats on your win :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2021 9:50:00 AM

Sandra I'm so sorry I've only just discovered this comment:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/5/2019 4:01:00 PM

Congratulations on your deserving win Jan. I'm glad this is fictional! Poignantly beautiful! : ) xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2021 9:50:00 AM

Connie I'm so sorry I've only just discovered this comment:-( hugs jan xx

Larry Bradfield

Date: 9/15/2016 2:52:00 PM

A beautiful poem..my congratulations.Larry

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 3:43:00 PM

Thanks Larry:-) hugs Jan xx

Sharon Gulley

Date: 9/15/2016 2:25:00 PM

A beautiful and nostalgic write my dear pen friend. I love your poem. Congratulations on your awesome win. Much love, Sharon

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 3:42:00 PM

Thanks Sharon it was so lovely t showcase an older poem that rarely gets read these days:-) hugs Janxx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/13/2016 11:32:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your win. Thank you for supporting one of my contest. Stop by my blog "An Angels Tear" if you'd like. Smiles and Hugs..... LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 6:54:00 AM

Thanks so much for the contest it is so lovely to have the chance to showcase once of my earlier poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/31/2015 4:18:00 AM

Hi Jan, , Congratulations on having your poem featured on the soups home page. ~Always & Forever~ LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2015 5:29:00 AM

Oh Wow thanks Linda I didn't know:-) Hugs Jan xx

Abdiel Rios

Date: 1/29/2015 8:51:00 PM

Good poem , I have a question the paradise is love right?

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2015 2:32:00 AM

Yes the paradise for was her love for her husband - for him it is he now resides in heaven:-)Hugs Jan xx

Jerry Bolton

Date: 1/29/2015 10:07:00 AM

Many a lonely heart has suffered this kind of pain, Jan. To fight for King and country is a right. An honor. I don't know if this is a true account, but it matters not, what matters is your vision which caused you to pen this particular poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/29/2015 11:55:00 AM

The poem was simply inspired by the picture posted for the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Bill Yates

Date: 1/11/2015 9:19:00 AM

I too remember those "halcyon days".

Jan Allison
Date: 1/29/2015 11:55:00 AM

Since I joined less than a year ago I've written nearly 500 poems in my own name and about another 30 with my writing partner Darren Watson under than name Jadazzle United - sadly Darren is ill at the moment and our writing is on hold:-( Hugs Jan xx

Bill Yates
Date: 1/11/2015 9:32:00 AM

You have to be prolific to forget poems you wrote only a few months ago!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/11/2015 9:25:00 AM

Thanks Bill I love the image we were given to inspire us - I had forgotten about this poem - its lovely to re read it again:-) Hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/20/2014 10:35:00 AM

I don't smile much these days. Jan, sorry to know the feeling of a hidden smile..Linda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/20/2014 10:11:00 AM

hehehe, I'm back...Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2014 10:15:00 AM

:-) always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile - mine is in hiding today :-( Hugs Jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/6/2014 10:47:00 PM

THANK YOU FOR THE REPLY

Jan Allison
Date: 8/7/2014 3:09:00 AM

:-) XX

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 12:17:00 PM

Jan,, :) Congratulations, on your winning poem... Love Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2014 7:29:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Linda I do appreciate you taking time to comment on our works. Hugs jan xxx

J. R. Corbin

Date: 7/24/2014 10:43:00 AM

I think you deserved a higher ranking. Congrats, and thank you for sharing this.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 10:46:00 AM

Thank you so much for the lovely comment J R. I was delighted to even get placed in the contest so your comment really has made my day. Hugs Jan x

Roy Jerden

Date: 7/23/2014 5:11:00 PM

I just read this one. Looks like you placed well in the contest, based on the comments. Well done. Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2014 5:16:00 PM

I got 4th place Roy and I am delighted as it's my first attempt at doing a poem from a picture as inspiration. thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/23/2014 9:19:00 AM

Melancholy is what makes this write so beautiful; memories that will live right till the end. Congratulations on your deserved win, Jan! // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2014 11:07:00 AM

Thanks as ever for your lovely comments Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/23/2014 8:29:00 AM

Last two lines say so much and are a perfect ending to this wonderful write my friend!! "Now he resides in paradise And in the heart of his lonely wife" Big congrats on your fine win my friend!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2014 11:07:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx

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