Paradise

i swim in the pools of your eyes lost in depths, a cascading thought stumbles through mind in misted cries wondering could your heart be sought? i've tumbled once on rocks of past drowning in the depths, my heart sank its echo, a thunderous blast left me jaded, a soulless blank my heart pounds fast, my mind thinks twice wondering is love what it seems is in you found true paradise or oasis of lusted dreams? i stand in this moment aglow lost within the depths of your eyes lured in the thrust of your shadow i surrender in breathless sighs September 26, 2019 N-A Rerun 3 poetry contest Sponsored by John Hamilton September 21, 2019 Picturesque Rhyme Poetry Contest n/a

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Susan Ashley

Date: 9/30/2019 6:55:00 PM

I love the vulnerable and romantic beauty of your expressive poem, Sandra. Your last line is a stunning finale that has me surrendering to the unguarded emotions of this exceptional piece. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/30/2019 7:02:00 PM

Thank you Susan...not often i write in rhyme or of beauty so both put in one poem are a challenge for me :) hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/28/2019 12:58:00 PM

Congrats on a well deserved win.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/28/2019 1:06:00 PM

Thank you so much Rick :) hugs

Hello There

Date: 9/26/2019 10:09:00 PM

Congratulations, Sandra <3

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/27/2019 10:19:00 AM

Thank you my friend :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 9/26/2019 7:27:00 PM

I can't believe this got an N/A, well you picked a good one for this contest, congrats on another top win!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/26/2019 7:35:00 PM

Thank you so much John...you know how i struggle with my rhyme so this win really made me smile tonight... hugs :)

Chris Green

Date: 9/23/2019 7:50:00 AM

Wow, you took the contest photo in an entirely new direction and I love it. A paradise among the flowing waters and the lush landscape, such a beautiful offering. Desire is definitely rushing through those waters.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/23/2019 9:13:00 AM

Thank you my friend...you know me and rhyme and the struggle with it....so started thinking of how to pen this one with rhyme...i didn't want to describe the scene i wanted to tie it in somehow...not sure if it will work for the contest judge but it was a fun write... hugs :)

Silent One

Date: 9/22/2019 2:01:00 PM

Very romantic indeed, an insight to your love for another.... an enjoyable read..

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/22/2019 2:16:00 PM

Thank you S.O...the photo brought this one out...:) hugs

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/22/2019 2:06:00 AM

You write some of the most romantic poetry I've seen here... I'm sure you're blessed with a heavenly love who shares your heartfelt dreams. God bless you and your wonderful poem with a win

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/22/2019 10:05:00 AM

Thank you Regina, what a sweet thing to say... this contest had a picture of a waterfall, this is just what my muse came up with for the given photo :) Blessings and hugs to you my friend

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/21/2019 10:39:00 PM

Cynic that I am, I went all in for the question in the third stanza "...or oasis of lusted dreams?" A bit surprised that the answer was Paradise, but secretly glad at heart. SUPER entry for the contest, Sandra! Best wishes, Gershon

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 10:44:00 PM

lol...you know me and my sad poems all to well but sometimes my muse throws some softer ones out there...can't make rainbows without sun and rain right? Thank you my friend :) hugs

Hello There

Date: 9/21/2019 10:03:00 PM

Beautiful, Sandra ~ a guarded heart finally giving in to a moment of pure bliss <3 Enjoy ;) Good luck in the contest!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 10:33:00 PM

thank you...it was just what fell from my muse...and much thought to make it rhyme and fit the given photo...:) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/21/2019 9:41:00 PM

The depth of a heart in love knows no bounds Sandra. This is very beautiful! I am sure this will please Eve. xxoo

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 9:47:00 PM

Thank you so much my friend, i always struggle with rhyme, the picture was so alluring to my muse that i had to attempt it...hugs :)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 9/21/2019 9:10:00 PM

Sandra, Well now. In the words of Julie Andrews.., 'these are a few of my favorite things'. Perfect for another Saturday night (a la Sam Cooke). -Richard

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 9:23:00 PM

Thank you Richard! :)

Judy Ball

Date: 9/21/2019 6:47:00 PM

This is absolutely lovely Sandra. Beautiful emotion. The feeling of a wounded heart reaching just once more. Great stuff. God Bless, JB

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 7:48:00 PM

Thank you so much Judy...i seem to always put a touch of sadness in my softer poems too...:) hugs, God Bless you my friend

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/21/2019 4:10:00 PM

This piece deserves to be in paradise Sandy, stunningly beautiful indesd. Have a blessed weekend,poetry hugs , Gordon

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 4:17:00 PM

awww Thank you for your kind words today Gordon, this one took a bit to write....have a blessed weekend my friend :) hugs

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/21/2019 3:13:00 PM

Wow woman! I am stunned! This is so fabulous! And what's up with your muse? She has been pretty lighthearted lately! Ok maybe a bit sad in parts but come on you have most definitely been rocking it!;)

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 3:31:00 PM

She's been offering her dark tones, but throwing some beauty in...it all started with a few contests wanting beauty after my trip to montana, it seems that trip inspired me with some gorgeous images...i think my barren fields was the first of them, it got potd but this one was written for a contest off a beautiful image... thank you for your kind words my friend :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 9/21/2019 3:04:00 PM

This is stunningly written Sandy, just beautiful! Already a winner to me!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 3:23:00 PM

Thank you John...you know me and rhyme and the challenge it brings, so hearing this from you made me happy...i read this one over and over several times before posting it.... hugs :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/21/2019 2:19:00 PM

First ever rhyme I have seen from you --though I am sure you write them often enough. Indeed a picturesque write, Sandy..I heard the caution in the opening lines..but liked the turn.. lost in depth of eyes..can't go wrong there.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 2:31:00 PM

Thank you my friend...my rhymes are not often good, i struggle in them, i did the enclosed rhyme for dear hearts contest that was POTD, but i do not pen them often, only when a contest requires it and sparks my muse...:) hugs