Papa Wasn'T Rich But He Loved Her So

E. L. E. K. T. R. A. 



the spring had come and gone
  the summer song was sung
   autumn dragged its feet 
  and winter brought defeat 
 her momma was a snitch indescribable 
 papa wasn't rich but he loved her so 

 'never a pretty girl 
  not even in her prime 
     hatred borne of envy 
   corrupted heart and mind
 oppressed by the wealthy and the beautiful
 there never was a grafter with less to show
       here's a face that you know 
      bouncing off the window pane
     you don't have to be told that 
    never will you ever be the same 

  when learning to decieve
 she'd always done her best
      to come across as clever 
    detached n' unimpressed 
 her momma was a snitch, irresponsible
 papa wasn't rich and he had to go 
         hear the clatter of feet 
        running through the dirty rain
      she's tearing up the street, the 
    one constant in her life is pain

      tell it like it is 'til the story hits home 
papa wasn't rich but he loved her so 


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Newest song
I haven't changed it much for this forum. 

I have now! 2nd draft. Ok 3Rd n hopefully final draft. 

Comments most welcome. Thanks, Rightly.

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Date: 12/19/2016 6:59:00 PM
Just wanted to quickly say, I looooved hearing the song behind these words, Rightly. Amazing job! Always, Laura
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Date: 7/9/2016 1:22:00 PM
Thanks Seeker. This one came about quite easily, the music was another story. I wonder how it'll do in a live performance. I hope it's not too gloomy.
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Date: 6/24/2016 8:20:00 PM
I'm impressed, Rightly. Much enjoyed your top written song. ;) linda
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Rightly Jennings
Date: 6/25/2016 8:00:00 AM
Thanks again Linda. I haven't recorded this one. It will surely take a while to get smooth but I'm on to it. Rightly.
Date: 6/17/2016 3:12:00 AM
Wow....utterly impressive Rightly!!!!! I can't wait to hear the demo ; ) There's a good build-up in these lyrics and its well crafted as usual...the second to last stanza with her feet running through the rain is awesome and memorable. Wonder what inspired this one! Always, Laura
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Date: 6/17/2016 4:52:00 PM
Thanks laura. This will be fun to play. Some women seem to believe they can break the wules n a gent will be disciplined n courteous. Gentlemen needn't be doormats.
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