Pantoum For the Promiscuous

We're not supposed to act like sheep 
just because He is The Shepherd. 
He is much more inclined to weep 
when we refuse to heed His Word.  

Just because He is The Shepherd, 
our blind-born sins torment Him so. 
When we refuse to heed His Word 
we defile more than we can know.  

Our blind-born sins torment Him so 
as our freewill we waste away.
We defile more than we can know 
when with sly Lust we choose to lay.  

As our freewill we waste away - 
just because we may feel “left out”: 
when with sly Lust we choose to lay;  
oft sleeping thoughtlessly about.  

Just because we may feel left out,
we ignore our blessed patient guide: 
oft sleeping thoughtlessly about, 
from honest conscience seek to hide.  

We ignore our blessed patient guide, 
while truest Love looks helpless on. 
From honest conscience we seek to hide, 
fearing the chance of "bliss" is gone.  

While truest Love looks helpless on, 
He is more inclined to weep: 
fearing the chance of bliss is gone. 
We're not supposed to act like sheep.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/24/2015 4:03:00 PM
wonderful!
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Date: 12/15/2014 2:17:00 AM
Wow! Wow! This is very deep powerful compelling Pantoum, Perry! The refrain repeated lines in the pantoum makes even more provoking and gained in its strength. Yes, we, all mankind were not supposed to act like sheep. Like sheeps we're always getting lost in the way not heeding the call, always indulging themselves taking detours here and there and so many never found again lost forever in the dark and ferocious mouth of a self indulging and as you say very promiscuous sinful world. I really love your very bold and filled of truth pantoum my dear friend. :) Love and hugs! xxxx D.
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Perry Mcdaid
Date: 12/16/2014 3:33:00 PM
Thank you so much, Dorian.
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