Panting Poet

Breathless
                             Mi
                    with palms damp
                and the gnarled mane
              as this poet in dark muse
           strokes the coiled strans back
        revealing tattered cheek and bone
       top life’s weathered troddened mask 

    eye clouded through see to one but have i  
   lips crusted dried these with kiss to one and
   lined cloaked mi wretched the not minds she
  bather and disrober a becomes aficionada my
   arrange find locks knotty my gentle the with
    whisper the ears anxious these in abruptly
      "awe all my mi my you missed so have i"
                             Mi
                        exhausted




*The second stanza is read; right to left
top to bottom so too, the daring; read as the usual...
the poet "en-depth" will find no..despair

I so hope that anyone reading this long poem
doesn't mind that I used the ( i ) twice here.
The capital (I) kind of deranged the picture.
I will try writing shorter ones.
I hope that I am right; this being "shape"
TY...I am new here

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 9/11/2015 7:44:00 PM
Thanks for checking out my site. I see you sent a friend request, I will happily accept.
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Date: 9/8/2015 7:55:00 AM
I tried to find you on Facebook with no success. Send me a friend request and I will gladly except. If you have a chance check out my website www.wisedummypoet.com
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/11/2015 6:01:00 PM
Ooops...I did in fact visit your web site...impressive Rich!....mi
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/11/2015 5:51:00 PM
P.S...I did post again Rich....mi
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/11/2015 5:44:00 PM
Ooooo Rich, with regard this, I keep trying to explain here about face Book and it consistently informs me that the reply exceeds...I need to explain...any ideas? I am emphatically new to the web scene since me becoming single...lol...mi
Date: 9/8/2015 7:49:00 AM
"The good girl"
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Date: 9/7/2015 11:12:00 AM
Rich is fine, drop by and visit, perhaps I will have something to your liking. Let me know when you have posted more pieces.
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/8/2015 4:48:00 AM
By the way...I did initiate the Face Book page recently, and I am looking for friends, if you wish, I certainly would admire your feedback on the site..it is under my name..."Mi Nubilary" I strictly set the site up for artists. I do pray that it stays such. TY Rich....mi
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/8/2015 4:42:00 AM
Good day to you Rich...this is definitely disconcerting...I have inadvertently deleted my post with your poem titles which you suggested I read with regard my query. I remembered the "Dancer" poem of yours yet the one about the Girl in it, I emphatically can not remember..lol..and I would definitely love to read it....mi
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/7/2015 6:58:00 PM
Hello Rich! I will be headed to your Posts presently sir, and I thank you for reading me....mi
Date: 9/7/2015 8:56:00 AM
A most interesting piece and I find it visually pleasing as well.
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/7/2015 10:01:00 AM
Thank you kindly Richard ! Can I take the suffix off of your name and call you Rich? *sm... I can still write Richard if you wish...I was merely suggesting for the bruses on my fingers sake; typing so much ! lol...so nice of you to pop in sir and comment....mi
Date: 9/7/2015 7:42:00 AM
Love the write and the shape, welcome to soup Hugs Eve
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/7/2015 10:33:00 AM
How very kind you are Eve! I so love the Isha in your name sake!...mi
Date: 9/7/2015 2:53:00 AM
Hi, kind of looks like a SPADE.. I'm reading the second stanza right to left. :) By the way, I did not roll the welcome mat out, when you join the soup.... Mi Nubilary, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 9/7/2015 7:48:00 AM
The word "Breathless" at the top of the poetry is the 'target'...the body of the poetry is the arrow head..Visit me on facebook and the clear will appear here...TY for your interest Linda...oo I remembered your name! Yep, I did! Ok...enyore arcane...mi
Date: 9/6/2015 1:17:00 AM
Hello Mi, enjoyed reading this, and a warm welcome here..'
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/6/2015 4:03:00 PM
I thank you sir! I look forward to being enlightened by your writes soon....mi
Date: 9/5/2015 12:17:00 PM
Mi, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/6/2015 4:01:00 PM
Such the warm welcome; with great force I do exsert...thank you! Is "Skat" what you wish for me to correspond with? I am emphatically "Mi"...in english it is pronounced 'me'. Thank you for your kind welcome; again, your welcome was indeed the priviledge to witness...mi
Date: 9/5/2015 10:10:00 AM
Interesting shape poem. Anxiously waiting the whispers from a former love. Welcome Tim
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/5/2015 10:13:00 AM
Well, certainly my thoughts of hope are with you Tim..and I thank you...mi
Date: 9/5/2015 7:58:00 AM
- This is a great "shape" poem, Mi !!! - Welcome to P-SOUP !!!! - hugs from Norway // Anne-Lise :)
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/5/2015 8:15:00 AM
Thank you, and thank you! Locks from the toughest provence of Philadelphia Pennsylvania Anne-Lise....mi
Date: 9/5/2015 4:35:00 AM
what a fascinating shape poem Mi - may I suggest you put the explanation of reading the second stanza top to bottom right to left at the top of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/5/2015 8:02:00 AM
Thank you for the dirrection
Date: 9/5/2015 1:00:00 AM
Hi, Mi Nubilary... Thanks for sharing your paint brush. It's not long at all.... And, you don't have to be sorry for using the (I) more than once. Lol, I use I & the, so often. Sometimes I can't take from my own poetry. However, thank you for the wonderful visit. Welcome to poetry soup. You can call me Linda... My poetic name was painted by me of course. Thanks for the deep intro... Linda
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Mi Nubilary
Date: 9/5/2015 1:19:00 AM
Thank you Linda...I see That I failed to mention that the bottom stanza gets read from right to left...top to bottom...sorry
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