Pale Shelter

I am not certain of anything
You invade my space, but you're 
simply a mirage!
You didn't give me affection, instead
you gave me a vacant shack.
I want to be in charge…….
Completely!
How can you see me?The real me,
I don't understand…….
I can't fix this, it's too broken
You didn't give me affection, instead
you gave me a vacant shack
No need to ask questions, this is
unfixable
I thought you were well put together…..
Do you hear me?






Contest: Pale Shelter
Sponsor: John Hamilton
11/06/19

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 11/14/2019 8:58:00 AM
I guess I didn't read this, sorry about that my friend. I think this captures the feel of the song perfectly, I can feel the emptiness in the emotions of this poem. This should do well in John's contest.
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Date: 11/8/2019 12:19:00 PM
Too cool of a poem, so cold chillin', Alexis! You lay down personal truth beyond the pale. Your pen voice is not frail, nor is your ink unwell. Keep on dippin' deep into the heart of truth. Mighty fine poem! Love and hugs forever.
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Date: 11/6/2019 1:35:00 PM
I hope that you are heard , Alexis. Well done :)
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Date: 11/6/2019 1:03:00 PM
Hello Alexis Y. I have read this poem several times and I still do not know what this poem is about. Sorry- Someties i don't understand a poem. So i ask what it is about. hav a nice day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/6/2019 5:30:00 PM
Hello Alexis Y. thank you for explaining this poem to me. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Alexis Y.
Date: 11/6/2019 4:06:00 PM
Hi Darlene, No worries my friend. I totally understand. I wouldn't understand it either. It's an interpretation of the song Pale Shelter by the group Tears For Fears. Listen the song my friend. It's for John Hamilton's contest. Have a great day. I will visit you soon:-) Alexis
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