Painted Wounds

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Written: September 17, 2023 Lets Minichu on Fear Sponsored by: Mohan Chutani _____________________________________________________________ Stop dropping my hand, Dad The harshness of the epoch agonizes minds Need to keep my eyes clad A harsh anguish Bleak brownout brewing, blunted blinds Languish Partake Passion reminds Stake Stop dropping my hand, Dad Bleak brownout brewing, blunted blinds Stake

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/11/2023 2:33:00 PM

Congratulations Las! :)

Ink Empress

Date: 10/7/2023 9:08:00 PM

How did i miss this? Brilliant alliterations in this very tricky form! You’ve nailed it with excellent rhymes etc! Congratulations on your win, well deserved

Karen Jones

Date: 10/7/2023 9:02:00 PM

Congratulations Sotto on a 2nd place win!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/17/2023 1:49:00 PM

I feel for the boy who reaches his hand but doesn't get the help he seems to want or need. 'Bleak burnout brewing' was such a visual image...it took my breath away. Well done, Sir. Enjoy your evening, Sara

Panagiota Romios

Date: 9/17/2023 11:51:00 AM

A unique individualist style, Sotto! The image amplifies the fear, the boy has!. Reaching for a hand, when comfort is needed, applies to any age! I see a universality in this work, Pangie xx