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Pain Liquefied

As a molten drop of wax, running down, from a dying candle, a single drop of tear, left her eye’s boundary, making its way down, falling down without a sound, and crashed! The denouement of a sad life! Like pulverized shards of glass, it tore into the flesh, causing deep haemorrhage, somewhere inside the brain! August.6.2022 Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest

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Date: 8/8/2022 12:18:00 AM
Tears crashed and shattered, causing deep haemorrhage somewhere inside the brain, this poem for me brings to mind how many from Afghsnistan and from the Ukraine, have felt this, a drastic situation,cruel actions seared into their minds forever. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. So well penned, well done Valsa.
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Date: 8/6/2022 11:29:00 PM
Ooh! Light are the flutes... Crash go the cymbals; boom go the drums. Impressively penned, Valsa! Cheers, gw
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Date: 8/6/2022 3:46:00 PM
Deeply moving poem skillfully performed, Valsa. The shattered glass truly was an original method for them to convey the agony that they felt on the inside.  Blessings and best regards
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Date: 8/6/2022 11:21:00 AM
Yet many weep from joy . . . .Aloha!
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Date: 8/6/2022 7:54:00 AM
A worthy entry Valsa. The pain is certainly shown here in your verses. The shards of glass really was a unique way to express their internal pain. Blessings your way...
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Date: 8/6/2022 6:24:00 AM
Poignant verse well delivered, Valsa. Best to you.
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Date: 8/6/2022 5:02:00 AM
Like a runaway train, sadness builds, I like this Valsa!
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Date: 8/6/2022 1:24:00 AM
Beautiful metaphorical poem Best for a win.
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