Over the River

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June.28. 2024

Bite Size poem. No.83. Poetry Contest

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Over the wide stretch of water flowing along, In a small boat the lovers made their way. Before them the river hurtled headlong. Leaving behind the sullen shores, all their cares, Enjoying the currents’ swing and sway, The two, paddled along to seamless shores.

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Ink Empress

Date: 7/2/2024 1:31:00 AM

So beautiful and soulful how youv depicted the ambience of two lovers engrossed in each other’s warmth. I love how the picture is so fitting too for this verse youv delivered. In six lines youv said so much and left us readers in awe captivated! I love especially the line “ Leaving behind the sullen shores, all their cares, Enjoying the currents’ swing and sway,” thats what love does! Shows us the way to find peace away from sullen shores! Beautiful! Pleasure always reading your work! FAVE

The Situation

Date: 6/30/2024 2:05:00 PM

Puts me in the mind of Mark Twain and the Mississippi.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/30/2024 10:09:00 AM

So romantic, takes me back for sure. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/29/2024 9:09:00 PM

it's all about substance and mood which you effectively displayed, valsa...this drips of romance in brief lines: exquisite ! blessings

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/29/2024 6:51:00 PM

I get a serene feeling while reading this poem. I have been in rowboats on lakes and streams. This poem brings back memories.

Joe Dimino

Date: 6/29/2024 4:05:00 PM

'The two, paddled along to seamless shores." -- Wonderful heartfelt imagery. Very romantic write!

Yann Rolland

Date: 6/28/2024 5:30:00 PM

great metaphor, a boat is like dreaming, thanks valsa for the charming poem

Tonye George

Date: 6/28/2024 11:21:00 AM

I want to ride on a boat with my lover, leaving all my worries away. Very soothing piece Dear, Valsa. I'm beginning to cling to the positive side of love and romance. It didn't use to be my thing.