Outta My Mind

youtook me, shook me outta my mind
What were you trying to find?

you took me, shook me outta my world
gave it a twirl. spinned me for a whirl

We made love..you drove me crazy
My mind was hazy..We were lazy
that day you drove me...outta my mind


Carron Carter-original
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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August 28, 2015 at 5:20 PM
YES! This works on several levels! VERY GOOD! Favorite line: "you took me, shook me outta my world." Question: Did you want "spinned" me for a whirl? Not "spun"? ? ? Typo: space between youtook 1st verse, 1st line. Typo: a comma instead of a period between twirl and spinned (2nd vrs. 2nd line) & Capital "G" on gave. All small tweaks! This was fun to read!
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