Daver Austin Poet Tanka

Out the Window

OUT THE WINDOW

our dear old spaniel
fast asleep by the window
blends so perfectly
with autumn colors outside
he whines    paws the chair    dreaming

our big old oak tree
ever but never changing
seems to reach the sky
while all surround    they rustle
they dance    they speak    come alive!

i’m out the window
watching the autumn ballet
fixed on the minute
inhaling autumn’s sweet breath
then this flash of wings    blue jay

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Chula Fleming October 31, 2012 at 9:38 AM I love the warmth and tenderness in this poem. I can almost smell the autumn leaves and feel the sun warming golden reddish fur.

Carol Sunshine Brown October 19, 2012 at 7:04 AM Thanking you today for your comments on my writing Daver. I hope you have a very pleasant weekend and I wish to see more of your work next week. Love, Carol XXXX

Vicky Tsiluma October 18, 2012 at 2:30 PM Now that's obviously a lovely scenery! i love how you've spaced out the last lines -gies an interesting rhythm/ Lovely Tankas Daver!

Holly Moore October 9, 2012 at 11:33 PM Wow! I really like this one..The autumn air and it's imagery just jumps off the page. Great job with the Tanka. Thanks for commenting on my poem. That was very nice of you...xxoo Holly

Sara Kendrick September 27, 2012 at 1:57 PM I like the unexpected of this one..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Thanks for stopping by..By the number of those squitters they was doing mor than kissing under the holly..Sara

Phyllis Babcock September 20, 2012 at 1:53 PM Just love the picture you have created with this wonderful poem. Autumn is in full swing and now sad thoughts about the upcoming winter. Man I would love to go somewhere warm. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich September 19, 2012 at 9:32 PM thanks for your comment today, my friend!

Joe Maverick September 19, 2012 at 2:20 PM Really spellbinding words here Daver, I was wandering along with the lines there.." a true blast of brilliance, well done indeed..! Joe..)

Michelle Mac Donald September 19, 2012 at 9:37 AM You've set the mood for the beautiful write with the spaniel blending "with autumn colors outside". The magic of "the autumn ballet", "autumn's sweet breath", a lovely scene to enjoy and share, Daver! What sort of music would accompany a scene such as this? Perhaps nature makes its own symphony. Best to you all! Love, Mikki

Andrea Dietrich September 19, 2012 at 7:37 AM WOW, one of your best,daver. That last line was so awesome. And the tree coming alive in middle stanza. outstanding work.

Kash Poet September 18, 2012 at 1:57 PM A lovely Tanka here Daver!Great imagery!Enjoyed the read.

Tanya Harrington September 18, 2012 at 12:57 PM What a wonderful fall day! Lovely tanka :) Tanya