Out of the Blue

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Our baby coos after a restful sleep, Ah-boo, ah-boo, ah-boo, sounds I would repeat, With his eyes wide open, he sneaks a peek, Ah-boo, ah-boo, ah-boo, sounds I would repeat, Only cute chuckles he renders for he cannot speak, Ah-boo, ah-boo, ah-boo, sounds I would repeat, Tried to have him say, "mama", all through the week, Ah-boo, ah-boo, ah-boo, sounds I would repeat, Suddenly, he says "mama", I dropped down to my feet From ah-boo now I say mama, sounds that I repeat.

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Constance La France

Date: 5/24/2019 7:21:00 AM

William, this write is delightful, well done. I have sent you a urgent soupmail can you please check it.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/24/2019 8:25:00 AM

Thank you and yes I did read your message and I hope the applicable changes are in compliance, Aloha wk

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2019 3:37:00 PM

Love this one and how you changed that repeating line!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/13/2019 4:11:00 PM

Yes, monotonous as I've slowly squeezed the lemon thoroughly, forming the pucker in the end, hm maybe I should write, but not until I say 'Thanks Andrea!", Aloha wk PS: btw, picture of my great grandson whose grandpa is sitting on my lap of my profile picture

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/13/2019 3:22:00 PM

This is just excellent..so well done, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/13/2019 4:14:00 PM

Pales in comparison to the few I've read of yours--no doubt, further viewing of your work is imperative, thanks Vijay!, Aloha wk PS: btw, picture of my great grandson whose grandpa is sitting on my lap of my profile picture