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Out of Control

Everything is out of control Caving down on me And crushing My skull I try to grab hold But everything Swings Out of the way Like an acrobats Trapeze And I'm trying to stand firm Trying not to fall But the ground is swaying Nothing will hold still I'm knocked onto my back Forced to stare at the sky I want to throw up Or perhaps... Just die

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/10/2013 8:25:00 PM
Rhiannon, a very cool and fascinating first poem on the soup.... This hear my friend is a sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 6/7/2013 8:10:00 AM
Well written poem-- the title summarizes the way we all feel at times-- you have captured this well. Welcome to P/Soup... enjoy.
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Date: 6/6/2013 11:54:00 AM
Rhiannon. Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. My name is Linda; I’m here to invite you on over to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* please consider my contest* hopefully you find this place to be the comfort zone your writing pen is looking for. If you ever need or want honest feedback on a certain poem let me know. Stop by anytime you like. I’m looking forward in following you and your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy this community; we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend Linda
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