Ouch Footle

OUCH!

Fists fly
Black eye

08~11~14

Written for WRITE A FOOTLE contest sponsored by Judy Konos

~awarded 1st place~
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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A   Avatar
September 2, 2014 at 11:27 AM
Hi Jan, WOW..I missed all your old replies... thank you
Gibson Avatar
August 19, 2014 at 8:52 PM
Ha ha...ouch. Very good, Jan. Congrats.
Allison Avatar
August 20, 2014 at 1:49 AM
Thanks for dropping by Faye:-) Hugs Jan xx
Fraser Avatar
August 19, 2014 at 5:02 PM
Many an eye, when fists fly, black, aye! - love it - <*> James
Allison Avatar
August 19, 2014 at 5:04 PM
Thanks James for the lovely comment:-) Hugs jan xxx
Callus Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 5:48 PM
Oh!!! another excellent Footle. Well done Jan, and congrats on your top win. Did I hear somebody say this made an impact?!:)*$* {Returned last night from Paris; enjoyable holiday!}
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 5:51 PM
Thanks for the lovely comment Paul i am flying high with great placement in contests recently. So lovely to see you back -glad you had an excellent break and I hope to see lots of romantic Parisian writes now:-) Hugs Jan xxxx
Nance Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 8:07 AM
Grats on your win!!!!
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 8:09 AM
Thanks Casarah - I may get good and write a decent poem one day LOL Hugs Jan xxx
Kendrick Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 6:26 AM
Way to go ..Congrats..Sara
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 7:16 AM
Many thanks Sara:-) Hugs jan xxx
Mehta Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 5:11 AM
Congratulations on this fine write, Jan
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 5:18 AM
thank you so much for your comment Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 3:33 AM
- Congratulations with first place in FOOTLE contest !!! - Well done, Jan ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 3:58 AM
Thanks Anne Lise - it was harder to write than a longer poem! Hugs Jan xxx
Onclaud Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 1:01 AM
how impactful, jan.. sweet congrats!
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 3:58 AM
Thank you for you lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx
A   Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 10:11 PM
Jan, ouch!!! Love it...Linda
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 3:57 AM
Thanks Linda:-) Hugs jan xx
May Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 9:35 PM
I love this one....congrats on a great win Jan
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2014 at 3:57 AM
Many thanks Joseph:-) Hugs jan xx
Sietesantos Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 7:42 PM
Jan, I love this clever piece! You really know how to do it! Congratulations on a beautiful first place win!!!Pandita
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 7:43 PM
Many thanks Pandita i was delighted to see my name on the list:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Lamoureux Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 6:42 PM
Ha ha, you did well!
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 6:43 PM
Thanks Richard:-) Hugs jan xxx
Mcintosh Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:27 PM
Excellent footle.... God bless you and I'm sending you much love and prayers. Love and hugs :)
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:31 PM
Thanks for the lovely comment Regina:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Richards Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 11:28 AM
Next time, maybe he'll duck !! lol
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:31 PM
LOL Thanks Carrie:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Dietrich Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 11:19 AM
this one is very inventive, Jan. You are one of the few who told a story with yours. I usually just do definition footles with both syllables rhyming, so it's rare I do a story!! Congrats to you.
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:31 PM
Thanks so much Andrea YOUR comments mean the world to me:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Smith Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 10:40 AM
Congrats Jan on another first place :)hugs Tim
Allison Avatar
August 19, 2014 at 5:05 PM
Think his name is Tim:-) hugs jan xxx
Smith Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:31 PM
I wonder who that might be :) hugs
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:30 PM
I see I share the podium with a very special friend too:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Konos Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 10:37 AM
Thank you for entering my contest
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2014 at 12:29 PM
Thank you so much Judy I really enjoyed the challenge:-) Hugs Jan xxx
A. Sharma Avatar
August 15, 2014 at 2:36 AM
Love your punch Jan! Good luck!thats what we need !
Allison Avatar
August 15, 2014 at 4:40 AM
Thanks Dr Sharma for the lovely comment:-) Hugs jan xxx
Kendrick Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 5:14 PM
Good one..These are not so easy to come by but this one is unique..Thanks for stopping by..Reads like a winner to me..Sara
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 5:15 PM
Thanks Sara it was far more of a challenge than I expected:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Smith Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 4:44 PM
put footle in the title :)
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 4:48 PM
ooh ty Tim I will xxxx Hugs Jan xxx
Nance Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 4:07 PM
Ouch! yeah that would hurt! :)
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 4:15 PM
LOL it would! Hugs Jan xxx
Roberts Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 3:48 PM
great one Jan ....love it...Seren
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 4:15 PM
Thanks Seren:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 2:25 PM
- Jan, footle looks fun to write :) - Well done ! - Luck in contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 2:34 PM
- Yes, I do believe - hard! :)
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 2:30 PM
Thanks Anne Lise it is quite a challenge to write something short yet for it to make sense but yes it was fun:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Devonshire Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 2:03 PM
Hon, this is a great footle. They say so much in just four syllables. You'll do well in the contest, my friend. Love, Carolyn
Allison Avatar
August 11, 2014 at 2:05 PM
Thank you so much Carolyn - I was surprised how difficult it was to write something meaningful in 4 words! Hugs Jan xxxx
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