Otsenre Ogaitnas

On your doorstep once stood 
This shadow thinner than clotheslines, just to
Share the verdant lore of its earthly existence
Even if its image was molded from the grains of salt 
Nonetheless, it has the proverbial taste for a
Real kinship with all life, as seen in its creative 
Expression, somewhat like a sort of written text

Of its tiny palms, sod with
Great charm of nobility, and yet you’ve curved
At the back of its head these doubts, which made
Itself to huddle in solitude, entertaining
The alarming phrases of inferiority that 
Nature never taught us 
Ah, now I am slaving myself thinking if this 
Shadow is still really mine, or am I still his?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 10/17/2010 9:01:00 PM
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Date: 10/28/2008 9:11:00 AM
An inventive write Ostenre.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 10/15/2008 12:36:00 AM
Hello Otsenre, Wonderful imagination! You are indeed a poet. No wonder someone learned and idolize you-walking man. Thank you for your comments and corrections. Looking forward to seeing you with Janet on December. Ernie
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Date: 10/14/2008 5:35:00 PM
I like the way this write flows and ithe imagery that it protrays, take care D-nyce
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Date: 10/14/2008 4:47:00 AM
A lot of thought went into this. Very clever ending. Excellent writing. Blessings Michael
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Date: 10/11/2008 10:08:00 AM
you naughty naughty boy I just read a blog from joe lol I love your new name sweety does not take your inner passion away from poetry or self you rockkkkkk peek a boooooooooo
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