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Origami Crane Garland

Moments of meditative serenity Crimping pleating floral white hybrid washi Shaping and triangulating dainty folds Stringing vertex wings of freedom symmetry Garland of classic crane origami Wishing long happy peaceful life AP: Honorable Mention 2021 Submitted on April 25, 2019 for contest A GARLAND sponsored by JULIA WARD

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Winged Warrior

Date: 5/25/2019 8:12:00 AM

Congrats!!! on your Honorable Mention my friend, Line...^WW^

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/25/2019 10:03:00 AM

Thanks, WW. Much appreciated.

Julia Ward

Date: 5/25/2019 5:26:00 AM

I think it would work better if you put "this daughter's wedding", for the introduction of "her" creates a distraction. I get put off the subject matter and wonder who the mother is.

Julia Ward
Date: 5/26/2019 2:00:00 AM

Yes, I know that - the "her" *as a word* creates the distraction from the rest of the poem, though.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/25/2019 10:16:00 AM

Thanks for your most inspiring contest, Julia. The mother in my poem is the one who has been patiently doing the origami for her daughter's wedding. I much appreciate the placement.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/28/2019 8:16:00 AM

This is darling; I have attempted origami, and I am horrible at it; tromping through throwing away pages and pages. Yes, I do believe you have mastered that art in addition to poetry and painting, friend.

Line Gauthier
Date: 4/28/2019 6:37:00 PM

LOL thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Caren.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/26/2019 4:29:00 PM

As someone who's enjoyed doing origami, BRAVO! This was beautiful and another "fav".

Line Gauthier
Date: 4/26/2019 4:40:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely visit and compliment, ML. Most appreciated.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/26/2019 3:22:00 PM

This is gorgeous and going into my Faves Line. I hope more get to read it. I would like to see it a top winner! : )

Line Gauthier
Date: 4/26/2019 3:36:00 PM

Thank you so much for the lovely visit and compliment, Connie.