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Ordinary Soul

My soul persists, not very strong Perhaps it is, I could be wrong Is the quality good, who knows Fair enough then, see how it goes I don’t own my soul, it’s not mine If you want it, then join the line Without offers, I shall foreclose Fair enough then, see how it goes Damned if I don’t, damned if I do Maybe take a rain check, in lieu Tell me god, was it me you chose Fair enough then, see how it goes

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Hat Bueckert

Date: 8/20/2023 3:50:00 PM

I like the feeling of this one, I feel much the same In the, see how it goes, department. Nothing certain, just keep on keeping on, soul and all. :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/21/2023 12:44:00 AM

Thank you Hat, you describe the soul department much the same as I do, keep on going, and see how it goes, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 8/15/2023 7:45:00 AM

This is an “out of the box” sort from you. Fair enough for anyone to question those things we may not be sure of. My belief is that a life and a soul are one. When we die, so does our soul.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/15/2023 9:45:00 AM

And you could well be right Lin, to try explain the intangible, probably best to keep it simple, I’m sure all religions have different interpretations of the soul, even the non religious people like myself, thank you so much for commenting, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/15/2023 12:32:00 AM

Certainly one of life's mysteries, does it die when we do or does it live on and is it ours for keeps or do we have to give it back. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/15/2023 12:49:00 AM

Difficult to say Tom, I honestly haven’t got a clue what my soul is, but as Anaya says below (soul searching) is probably more apt, than explaining what it is, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/14/2023 6:44:00 PM

Are we our souls? If your soul is telling you, then your soul is right. Having done so much soul-searching myself, testing whatever is thrown at me. It just never ends. Really enjoyed the kyrielle, you did it justice, you're a kind soul.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/15/2023 12:30:00 AM

Heya Anaya I’d honestly love to be in a position to explain my soul, but alas I cannot, maybe it’s impossible, so I simply go with what I can see, and try tell others I’m only one person, and I’m not judging what they see as their soul, thanks so much, now soul searching I do understand, cheers David

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/14/2023 2:09:00 PM

Creative work for sure. No, we are not ours but His. We can reject Him, but He will always have out open arms for us until the last minute. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/14/2023 2:27:00 PM

Heya Sara, I do understand exactly what you’re saying, my life is open to all possibilities in an agnostic manner, and never reject God out of hand, this one is just for me, thank you so much for kind comment, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 8/14/2023 1:54:00 PM

I love how this dances through the ownership question with non chalance - love 'join the line'! Having spent some time researching the family tree presented with so many from and to dates, everything loses and gains focus. Love this one!

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/14/2023 2:22:00 PM

Thank you Dilly, it’s just me taking a step back and considering in a matter of fact way my interpretation of a soul, I can only write from my own pov, yes I can feel life and connect with beyond, is it a soul, we’ll see how it goes, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/14/2023 1:19:00 PM

Impressive composition, David. Your eloquent verses consistently exhibit deep insight and persuasive prowess. It is undeniably true that one cannot possess their own soul while living, yet is it conceivable that our souls, devoid of life, may find solace in a predetermined realm, awaiting reclamation at a precise moment and location? Wishing you the best of luck in the contest dear friend.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/14/2023 2:15:00 PM

I have seen so much happening in this world to believe, absolutely everything and anything is possible, this is just an honest interpretation of how I perceive a soul, and is in no way meant to represent anyone else’s beliefs, your words of wisdom are always welcome Lasaad, cheers David