Opposing Poetry

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Written on December 19, 2023

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6 lines from Firefly Memories (Terza Rima) As the night rolled into a darkness rich With glimmering fireflies, vibrant, quiet And happy, charming, able to bewitch I caught them in Mason jars that riot Lights going on and off, soft, so soothing Breathing graceful whispers that sigh “try it” 6 new lines (opposing the old poem) Despite the morning, crisp and ever fresh Pouring out her dawn past the mountain’s crests, Begetting goosebumps on our naked flesh Kissed by colors, beauty that time protests, Reflecting dew, trembling on butterflies, Lasting songs, rich as the morning suggests.

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Silent One

Date: 12/19/2023 11:51:00 AM

Nice opposite to your original poem and imagery is stark in both of them..

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/19/2023 11:38:00 AM

Gina, there is a lush richness in your images and metaphors that matches the rich colors of a sunrise. I love the co9ntrast between the bewitching night of fireflies and the dawn "kissed by colors." If this is for a contest, best wishes. Sending you all the joys of Christmas, dear friend.