Premiere Contest WinnerOooooo - For Four Line Light Verse Contest

With his alphabet spaghetti my son kept spelling ‘OOOOOO’
His teachers say he’s clever so what was I meant to do
But when I got it figured out all I could say was Oops
For when I checked the can the label said Spaghetti Hoops


[Mr Google tells me that Spaghetti Hoops are known in the U.S. as Spaghetti-Os]


19 August 2021
For Contest: Four Line Light-Verse
Sponsor: L Milton Hankins
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Goldsmith Avatar
August 25, 2021 at 10:35 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a fun/creative~~story/write. Kids say and do the best things. Hope you have a picture of him and his OOOOOOO's. Have a blessed day............
Agustin Avatar
August 25, 2021 at 1:08 AM
Congrats! Thanks for sharing this, and for the chuckle it has created. God bless you.
Gauthier Avatar
August 24, 2021 at 8:21 PM
Charming poem, Terry ~ In Canada, we know them as Spahetti-Os as well but we got the drift, nevertheless it's always good to add the note as you did. Congrats on your top win!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 2:53 PM
Shopped last week, last-minute switcheroo from Campbells to Chef Boyardee, who would've known? Anyhow, congrats on your trophy win and precocious son, Aloha!
Flood Avatar
August 24, 2021 at 10:58 AM
Thanks, William. Terry
Allison Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 12:13 PM
Dropping back with many congrats on your trophy win Terry I knew this would appeal to Milton:-) hugs Jan xx
Flood Avatar
August 24, 2021 at 10:57 AM
Thanks, Jan. Seeing Milt’s blog, I keep thinking the trophy is gonna disappear, but it was still there last time I looked. Terry
Radhakrishna Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 11:42 AM
Congrats on your top win!! My daughter loves them too! You made a great verse with OOOOOOs!!
Flood Avatar
August 24, 2021 at 10:55 AM
Thanks, Krish. Glad you enjoyed. Terry
Cunningham Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 11:25 AM
Congrats Terry on your top win, just saw your comment to Milton so im not going to ask, but just say don't give up. Tom
Flood Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 11:54 AM
Thanks, Tom. No big secret, just an attempt to put it to bed. Wrote it twenty two years ago and every few years I edit (improve?) it. I really want to publish my second novel (which I think is the better) but although it’s not a sequel it does have serious tie ins to the first. So this one is kind of practice but it needs to be right because technically it will be publicly visible. Terry
Hankins Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 9:32 AM
Terry, so glad you entered this piece in my contest. It was delightful and rose to the very top of the 50 entries. It is one of the most enjoyable four-lines I have read in a long, long time. Congratulations!
Flood Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 11:09 AM
Thank you Milt. I’m well chuffed with top spot for a four liner... not my usual thing. Particularly pleased as my output is sparse right now, although that’s only partly down to meagre inspiration and partly down to a brain straining attempt to format a novel... WHICH IS DOING MY HEAD IN! Anyway, that’s by the by. Thanks again for the pat on the head. Terry
Darnell Sr Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 1:54 AM
Hi, Terry! OMG, this made me laugh so hard, and I took a drink of my iced tea and spat it all over my laptop here. Thanks! hahaha, Nah just playing! Guess that will teach me not to drink tea anymore around my computer, haha. Excellent penning, and thanks for a laugh. Best of Wishes, WIlliam PS; did he pull out six Os every time? Curious? Good Luck in the contest.
Flood Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 2:17 AM
Unfortunately, it is in the remit of spaghetti hoops to only contain Os. He did once find a couple of Cs but they were two halves of a broken one. Glad you enjoyed so much, William. Terry
Laurie Avatar
August 22, 2021 at 11:47 PM
Hello Terry ... I certainly got a chuckle out of this fine poem - thanks Terry - Lindsay
Flood Avatar
August 23, 2021 at 2:26 AM
Thanks, Lindsay. Not often I restrict myself to four lines but that was the rules. I actually already had the bones of this as a three or four stanza poem, maybe I’ll finish that... or maybe not, now the joke is out there. Cheers, Lindsay. Terry
Allison Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 3:04 PM
absolutely hilarious lol. i used to love alphabeti spaghetti and spaghetti hoops lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Flood Avatar
August 20, 2021 at 11:22 AM
Thanks, Jan. I have no idea what made me think about spaghetti hoops. Poor lad must have thought it was the April Fool’s day episode of Countdown. ;-) Terry
Cunningham Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 2:20 PM
Lol, love the humour Terry, one thing I find they're a hell of a lot easier to keep on your fork. Tom
Flood Avatar
August 20, 2021 at 11:24 AM
Thanks, Tom. You got that right... I always try the fork and spoon thing with long spaghetti but it always ends up the size of a hand grenade. Terry
Roper Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 9:36 AM
Cute verse, Terry, my grandbaby at 3 still speaks his own language. "nigh-night" is can I spend the night, ba-ba is still a glass of milk. Eeya is Peanut for my yorkie; I am still learning.
Flood Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 11:14 AM
Alas, with Spaghetti-Os there’s not a lot you can spell. Thanks, Eve, Terry
Omar Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 9:11 AM
What can you expect out of innocent kid . He can't tell which is which is did. You may pat attention and listen. It is not too late to learn a lesson .
Flood Avatar
August 19, 2021 at 11:16 AM
I’ll try harder, but he’s gonna struggle to spell much with Spaghetti-Os. Thanks, Mohamed. Terry
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