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Oneness… I was thinking of my good old grandpa, I loved him so much and called him Bababa. He was my favorite person in my life, He was always in peace, even in his strife. He was kind and giving, joyful to us all. He made us to believe we’re big and we’re tall. I loved him, and he loved me so ever much, His voice was lovely, and his kiss was as such. Although, he left us, and long time he is gone. He wanted me to know life was going on. I am thinking of him; he lives within me. If I die, who remembers me? Where I’ll be? We are destined to live, grow old, and then die. Somehow, we all do it without knowing why. We are just like a breeze at dawn, blind at heart, In this vanished abode, there is no new start. My grandpa was the moth, death the unseen flame, In this trap, who’s the hunter? What is his name? I asked myself a thousand times, perhaps more; How come there is so much pain? What’s the pain for? Maybe there is a God, and this is my hell. Suspect, I may, but only time, it might tell. If I see God, I will ask him what I’ve done. How come I am what I am, ten, without one? How come you make and then break us without shame? To us is life; to you, perhaps it’s a game. If you are the creator, then you should make, Please do not break me as a mistake. You made me, and you made me so ever nice, Now you wanted to break me like a block of ice! That is okay; it is not me that I failed. I lived my life; it is as though I’ve prevailed. I got married and laughed, played a few games, Where were you up to now? I called you with names. Never showed up to my sadness and my pain, What do you want from me? I am not insane. Maybe the story that I read was all wrong. I heard a symphony without any song. Maybe there was the Bang, which came from Big Crunch, Maybe there is a loop; we’re there as a bunch. I know the particles in my body well. They’re just temporary in me, I can tell. I know my particles; they lived from day one, I am the custodian until they are gone. I’m not worried that what will be out there, I will be part of that oneness without care. The next time when you see raindrops or a dew, That water might have come from me, it is true. Remember me; I’ll be part of the sunset, Who came once as a man with doubt and regret. 9/22/2018 Haloo Note: This particular style of poetry is called "Masnavi", it is a spiritual couplet usually with eleven syllables. Poetrysoup has a great explanation and example of this form of poetry.

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Date: 12/14/2018 5:34:00 AM
Your poem Oneness is second to none. Unique way of expression
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/14/2018 10:39:00 AM
Thank you my friend...
Date: 10/30/2018 9:58:00 PM
I like what you said in your comment down here to me. I am sorry I don't have longer to explore other poems you have written tonight. I cannot believe how behind i am getting here lately. Life goes so very fast, the older we get!!
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Date: 11/4/2018 3:51:00 PM
There is no rush Andrea. If this life is not enough, I'll come to hunt you on your next one... LOL, Pash
Date: 10/27/2018 11:53:00 AM
Beautiful, thoughtful tribute to your grandfather, and very moving in your expression of grief and questions of faith... I think we all struggle with these things sometimes. Wonderful poem- I especially like the ending! ;)
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Date: 11/4/2018 3:49:00 PM
Thanks Rhona, the ending of one thing is the beginning of the next... cheers.
Date: 10/9/2018 9:37:00 PM
Hi Pashang, this form is new to me and it suits your expessive writing style so well. Everytime i read from your poems i am deeply touched, for you always write from the heart and that is always important. Words from the heart are read by the heart. This one goes into my faves. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 10/16/2018 3:00:00 AM
Thank Mike, you are too kind...
Date: 10/7/2018 3:40:00 PM
Love everything about this poem, truly inspirational.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/9/2018 12:47:00 AM
Thanks Harry...
Date: 10/5/2018 5:32:00 AM
Grandfathers hold a very special place in our hearts. I do believe we are all part of the sunset and rain, I do believe we come again. Thank you for sharing such a special affectionate poem. Have a wonderful day dear Pashang.
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Date: 10/9/2018 12:47:00 AM
Thank you Pixie...
Date: 10/5/2018 4:02:00 AM
They never really leave us; the very cells in our bodies hold them within. Beautifully penned.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/9/2018 12:46:00 AM
Thank you dear...
Date: 10/3/2018 5:54:00 PM
Hello Pashang, This one is very moving, quite passionate, and full of common wonder for any or all of us who had the chance and opportunity to get know our grandparents. A masterstroke of a write my friend!! Superb Work as Always!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/4/2018 2:28:00 AM
Hello Gary... You are so kind... Thank you...
Date: 9/30/2018 3:17:00 AM
Not only this poem is very expressive but also lessen to be learned. Thank for sharing it.
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Date: 10/4/2018 2:27:00 AM
Thank you Ravi...
Date: 9/29/2018 11:06:00 AM
One of my great regrets in my life is that I never got to meet any of my Grandparents, loved the piece Pashang, well done...
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Date: 10/4/2018 2:26:00 AM
Thank you Charlie...
Date: 9/27/2018 4:08:00 PM
pashang, this piece is so divine and moving....your grandpa must be smiling wherever he is..huggs
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Date: 9/28/2018 1:06:00 AM
Thanks my dear nette, I'm sure he is smiling...
Date: 9/27/2018 6:16:00 AM
I was not fortunate to have met my grandfathers, both passed before I was born but I adored my grandmother. Still remember her laugh. Wow, Haloo you are certainly a master of these various forms, I particularly enjoyed this meaningful poem of yours . A fave....Maria hugs
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Date: 9/28/2018 1:05:00 AM
Thanks Maria... are you going to remember me when I die?
Date: 9/27/2018 4:31:00 AM
A read worthy of rereadings! Impressive work of art that deeply touches the mind, heart and soul. As a reader I identify with and rejoice in its Beauty and depth! A FAV. My deepest regards. Stay blessed always.
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Date: 9/28/2018 1:03:00 AM
Thank you, Besma... I'm glad you liked it... Blessing to you as well...
Date: 9/27/2018 12:55:00 AM
I live, live and all leave to merge within Your Oneness O' GOD- heart touching spiritual poetic dictions shared you're
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Date: 9/27/2018 1:00:00 AM
Thank you, my friend ...
Date: 9/25/2018 2:25:00 PM
Wow...fantastic poetry..
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/26/2018 11:32:00 PM
Thank you, you are too kind.
Date: 9/24/2018 3:53:00 PM
this is a lovely example of the style you have chosen. Your poem is filled with longing for understanding. I think nobody can know for certain, but I strongly believe we all go on, into another dimension. The soul goes on and yes, this is more like hell than what you can expect when you see Grandpa on the other side.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:18:00 PM
Nobody except me my dear Andrea LOL... indeed the soul goes on ... I think you and I belong to the same church...
Date: 9/24/2018 7:17:00 AM
Beautiful tribute to a man who helped make you a sensitive and wonderful poet. Well-done, my friend.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:15:00 PM
Thank you Caren...
Date: 9/23/2018 2:30:00 PM
First of all, the Masnavi is a most beautiful style of poetry, and second you did it wonderful justice in writing this magnficent piece dedicated to a wonderful grandfather! Sad but beautiful - your talent continues to shine, my dear friend! Hugs. Pandita
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:14:00 PM
Thank you, my dear Pandita, you are so kind...
Date: 9/23/2018 7:22:00 AM
This is such an awesome tribute to your grandfather and at the same time a wonderful introspection on life..well done, Pashang.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:13:00 PM
Yes, Vijay... you hit the bullseye... introspection on life... I think science has the answers but we don't know what to ask...
Date: 9/23/2018 4:57:00 AM
This poem is very expressive, Pashang. There is a lot to be learnt from your Grandpa, and I applaud the fact that he made you believe in yourself. Regards // paul
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:07:00 PM
Thanks Paul...
Date: 9/22/2018 11:06:00 PM
Excellent my friend...a special read for me too...grandparents, all they have for us is love...what more do you need...except for some candy lol...lovely write my friend...love & grandpa...^WW^
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2018 8:06:00 PM
Thank you WW...

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