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One Track Mind

Relentless. My life keeps rolling down the same old train track Chugga-chugga-chugga-chug! rhythm in my brain Like toy trains mechanical and steady, their throbbing beat predetermined path repeats predictable loop One track mind takes me nowhere, but feels oddly comforting stifling complacency the near death of me Frenemies my lagging caboose I let loose so relieved! Plugging ahead, no restraint Chugga-chugga-WHHOOOO! And 'though I cannot control the scenery or weather, I find freedom in unhitching whole rail-cars of passengers and freight Disruptive adding too much weight... Made it hard to climb these necessary mountains and keep moving ahead Lighter now I look for ways to still improve add more coal on inner fires, dreams and desires fueled up Gaining speed this loop is too small to contain zest for life my feisty trajectory what is best for me Terrified I hit the switch and pray that my timing is on target, switching the tracks before it's too late Brand new scenes unfold beyond me Truthfully they're scary! Unknown opportunities frightening to me Limitless too big to express these tracks called Hope- sometimes threaten to derail me, but get me back on course... And 'though I have no idea where I'm bound what I'll find I know I'm going somewhere ...no more one track mind! --- Listed as Free Verse, but actually another Shadorma form...

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Date: 7/19/2019 9:42:00 AM
What an innovative use of metaphor. It sounds like your life is on track. I enjoyed your poem.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 7/19/2019 10:15:00 PM
On track, yes... I think so- just a LONG ways from my destination! ;) Thank you, I'm so glad!
Date: 3/30/2019 4:45:00 AM
I am the expert at unleashing frenemies! so this stanza completely delighted me, my friend. "Frenemies my lagging caboose I let loose so relieved! Plugging ahead, no restraint Chugga-chugga-WHHOOOO!" BRAVO!
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/30/2019 11:23:00 PM
I knew you'd enjoy that part- especially with my jubilant little chugging train whistle sound effect! ;D
Date: 3/26/2019 5:00:00 AM
Sometimes we've got to switch those tracks and find something new to experience. Beautifully imagined and penned.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/26/2019 7:57:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! ;)
Date: 3/26/2019 12:55:00 AM
This is really cool, Rhona. You could also label it as symbolic. There is personification for things and animals. I can't recall a name for seeing one's life as a train, but it's a very interesting concept and you did a great job with it.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/26/2019 7:56:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea! Symbolic does seem to fit better... ;)
Date: 3/25/2019 6:31:00 PM
May your life stay on the right track. Good write!
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/25/2019 9:24:00 PM
I'm certainly trying... Many thanks!! ;)
Date: 3/25/2019 8:30:00 AM
ALL ABOARD!!!!! Great use of a metaphoric train set.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/25/2019 5:33:00 PM
Thank you so much!! ;)

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