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One Small Indiscretion

One wild happy-go-lucky senryu Was caught impersonating a haiku They levied no fines But removed two lines Now she's a stick-in-the-mud monoku

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 6/15/2019 2:03:00 AM

Clever doesn't begin to describe that mind of yours, just read about 30 or more from up in smoke and manyI made no comment so could keep reading.

Mark Toney
Date: 6/15/2019 5:40:00 PM

You are so encouraging, Barbara. You made my day! ~Mark

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/17/2019 11:05:00 PM

Exceptional, LoL, and congratulations on the way you presented this poem, so very clever! Loved it!. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Mark Toney
Date: 1/18/2019 6:47:00 AM

Jennifer, thanks for stopping by and bringing some encouragement my way. I just read your poem “The Bug Bites Again,” and I must say I was very impressed with your outings to the Kruger Park! Jennifer the Adventurer! ~Mark :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/17/2019 7:35:00 PM

very very cleverly done, Mark! and thanks for my placement in your last contest.

Mark Toney
Date: 1/17/2019 9:24:00 PM

Thank you for the nice comment, Andrea, and thank you for supporting the contest! ~Mark

Craig Cornish

Date: 1/11/2019 6:30:00 AM

Enjoyed very much Mark - to add an unapproved line - so clever and painful and true. You know how to have fun with it all.

Mark Toney
Date: 1/11/2019 8:40:00 AM

Craig, thanks for sending some encouragement my way! I'm also enjoying the many comments you're receiving on your blog post "Writing Quality Poetry." Cheers! ~Mark

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/10/2019 6:21:00 PM

Ha! Love it - love the merging of forms and the wit invested ... not a huge Limerick guy, but I love them when some thought has been put into it - excellent, my friend! :-D

Mark Toney
Date: 1/10/2019 8:57:00 PM

Thank you, Greg! Your thoughts are much appreciated. ~Mark

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/10/2019 1:36:00 PM

Cute one. Enjoyed reading your definition of the two forms. Sara

Mark Toney
Date: 1/10/2019 3:18:00 PM

Thanks, Sara! ~Mark

P.S. Awtry

Date: 1/10/2019 10:30:00 AM

my brain feels twisted. a senryu, impersonating a haiku, reduced to a monoku--all wrapped up neatly in a limerick. Clever :)

Mark Toney
Date: 1/10/2019 11:40:00 AM

Thanks, P.S.! You've made my day!!! ~Mark