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Do we ever really notice them? Those rare and perfect moments? Do we pay enough attention? Do we care enough to keep them safely tucked away? It was summertime, at the end of an ordinary day We were sitting on our front porch steps Our children were playing in the yard The air was warm, the grass was green and fragrant The sun had disappeared over the trees, and the nearest hill The sky shone with hues of purple, pink and orange You pointed as a first star appeared Then reached for my hand, carressing it with the roughness of your thumb We never thought to get a camera Or to write about this particular moment in a journal We never mentioned it the next day....or the day after that.... Perhaps something we should have done Just so that we would never forget such a perfect twilight....
~ ________________________________________ 'Where were you in the 70’s?' Contest Entry Sponsor Line Gauthier

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 3/18/2018 9:42:00 PM
A beautiful moment captured eloquently. Lovely and engaging penning Carrie, I really enjoyed it, congratulations on your win! xomo
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Date: 3/12/2018 8:01:00 AM
Such a lovely poem about a special moment in time, Carrie. Congratulations on your First Place win in the contest! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/11/2018 6:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Carrie with your beautifully written poem, a joy to read. :))
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/11/2018 11:03:00 AM
Thank you very much Roy!
Date: 3/11/2018 1:32:00 AM
Lovely piece, Carrie and a fine recollection of a beautiful memory. The camera's loss was our gain, congratulations. Viv x
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/11/2018 11:03:00 AM
Thank you Viv.... Such a nice compliment ! :)
Date: 3/10/2018 8:03:00 PM
Carrie, your wonderful winner truly takes me back to those golden times, perhaps BECAUSE we didn't video, selfie, text, snapchat, and whatever EVERYTHING that happened to us. Yes, back then AND TODAY TOO we needed and need poets like you to recapture the magic moments, finding the extraordinary in the supposedly ordinary. Terrific 1st place trophy winner! :) Gershon
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/11/2018 11:02:00 AM
I agree, Gershon, that today we are all so wrapped up in making sure we record ourselves during all those treasured moments, that we miss the experience altogether. I often catch myself and wonder how it came to be that the moment itself is what matters :) thank you for your observation ! :)
Date: 3/10/2018 5:53:00 PM
you keep jewels, my poetic friend congratulations on your win
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/10/2018 6:22:00 PM
Thank you, Frederic. You have some precious jewels of your own :)
Date: 3/10/2018 5:44:00 PM
Congratulation on your poem my friend it is beautiful, Emile.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/10/2018 6:24:00 PM
Your words are much appreciated, Emile !
Date: 3/10/2018 2:05:00 PM
Congratulation on your win! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/10/2018 6:24:00 PM
Thank you for your kind regards, Eve ! And for the encouragement!
Date: 3/10/2018 9:37:00 AM
A beautiful nostalgic moment. So easy to relate to. So well written. Congrats on your top placement and thanks for entering my contest, Carrie.
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Date: 3/10/2018 9:57:00 AM
What a lovely surprise and pleasure ! Thank you for liking this simple poem ....I didn't expect to see it place so high. Thank you again! :)
Date: 10/14/2011 5:56:00 PM
yes..days like that are precious and you so lucky! Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 10/14/2011 4:36:00 PM
Just one simple moment....greatly expressed...CONGRATS on this HM. Gwendolen
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Date: 10/13/2011 5:11:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your wonderful well deserved win with these stunning lines for a stand out day .... excellent read luv..
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Date: 10/13/2011 4:55:00 PM
All the "shoulda's" of our life have a way of coming back as memories. That's not all bad. Congratulations on your win Carrie
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Date: 10/13/2011 3:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your poetry placing in Frank's "One Stand Out Day" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/21/2011 12:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your 1st place win Carrie in Desiree's contest "Epiphanies". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/30/2011 1:04:00 PM
Hi Carrie - I love your poetry. I promise I will try to read more of your works. Congratulations on your BIG WIN in Desiree's contest. Best wishes, Kory
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Date: 1/30/2011 12:13:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your big win in the Epiphanies contest with another brilliant write ..enjoy with luv..
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Date: 1/30/2011 6:40:00 AM
This is beautiful Carrie. What wonderful memories and a great way to remember them. Many congratulations for this top notch.
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Date: 1/29/2011 11:45:00 PM
HEADS UP to you for this fine piece, carrie.. yes! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 1/29/2011 4:44:00 PM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest, carrie
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Date: 1/29/2011 4:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 1/29/2011 4:11:00 PM
congrads
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Date: 1/29/2011 3:09:00 PM
I'm glad for the announcement of the winners that I finally came to see this one, carrie. This is about love and perfect moments and I love the romance of it. Congratulations. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 1/29/2011 3:08:00 PM
lovely, congrats on your first place win in the contest
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Date: 1/29/2011 2:30:00 PM
This is a wonderful entry and a wonderful win. Love, Joyce
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